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The Girl with Seethrough Eyes

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The Girl With See-through Eyes

eyes that drive insane                                                      
heaven scented my soul mate ~
erotic hips swayed 
heaven's far away from me 
their sweet moment poem born  

love’s linking moments
rhymes of romantic musings ~
inking charms of fate
a poet’s playful journey 
a lover’s poetry shared

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Andrea Dietrich

December 15, 2024 at 12:29 PM

Back with my congrats on your gem here

I Am Anaya

December 15, 2024 at 1:25 PM

Ty, Andrea! Appreciate your thoughts always :):)

Christuraj Alex

December 14, 2024 at 8:09 PM

"rhymes of romantic musings" - Beautiful part of poetry is grandly revealed. Congratulations!

I Am Anaya

December 15, 2024 at 9:02 AM

Ty, Christuraj!

JC Brul

December 13, 2024 at 12:57 AM

Wonderful! You delicately weave passion of soulmate connection, intertwining love and romance with poetic grace.Thank you for sharing your story and congratulations, dear Anaya. ^___^ JCB

I Am Anaya

December 13, 2024 at 8:50 AM

Ty Jcb! Thank you for the placement, I enjoy your contests :):)

Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

December 12, 2024 at 3:41 PM

quite a sensual birthing of your first poem, nice double tanka - congrats on your contest win, and thanks for stopping by my page

I Am Anaya

December 12, 2024 at 9:02 PM

Thank you, Charlotte. I enjoy your poetry, as a matter of fact I can still remember your... Cardinal Rose, a fav of mine. :):)

Paula Goldsmith

December 5, 2024 at 10:51 AM

I enjoyed reading your Tanka write. What A Picture... "Good Luck" Have a blessed day writing away.............

I Am Anaya

December 5, 2024 at 11:58 AM

Ty, Paula!

Duke Beaufort

December 3, 2024 at 7:13 AM

Anaya, this particularly intrigues. It's striking in the amount of sensuality you convey in a compact poem. That takes talent! Heaven scented makes quite an impression on those observing! Smiles!

I Am Anaya

December 4, 2024 at 7:55 AM

I wonder, Duke, how was your first poem born, was it a difficult labor? lol. I am thankful to have gotten started here on PS. Ty!

John Read

December 2, 2024 at 8:07 AM

Hi Anaya, I'm sure it was love that inspired you to write a sensual first poem, good luck in the contest. xx

I Am Anaya

December 2, 2024 at 9:24 AM

It was, and I am forever grateful for how it came about, it ignited my inspiration and served as a catalyst for my further writing endeavors. Ty, John! xo

Maria Williams

December 2, 2024 at 12:01 AM

This is a beautiful romantic and sensual piece dear Anya. You mentioned 'Masala' and Shankar in you poem and I'm tempted to say that my Dad who was a master musician taught the great L Subramaniam, who wrote the Musical Score for 'Mississippi Masala'. Though he hadn't met Ravi Shankar personally, but knew of him, he taught another Great Conductor Zubin Metha (the late Pavarotti's conductor and conductor of the California Symphony) who no doubt knew Shankar. Just a bit of Trivia. I trust your art work is going well. Hugs Maria

I Am Anaya

December 2, 2024 at 9:21 AM

Ty, Maria. I am delighted you mentioned your father's impressive musical credentials, you must be so proud. I love the sitar and Indian movies!! :) Zubin Metha! yes everybody knows him here in L.A. (Los Angeles Philharmonic) The Hollywood Bowl, nearby is the Greek Theatre both Open-Air its were I frequently go, last I saw were the Gypsy Kings. As you can see, I move in different circles, there is so much music choices to love. Maria, I found Mississippi Masala stars Denzil Washington, and I will watch it tonight. Thank you for the wonderful trivia and memories you've brought me. Xhugs ~Anaya oh, I love to experiment with graphic design, (book covers) simple things. ;)

Ink Empress

December 1, 2024 at 11:09 AM

Dear anaya, this gives and emanates sensuality to me in the most exquisite manner in the form of tanka in few syllables youv said so much. I love the way youv written this, especially how you’ve stated “ heaven scented my soul mate “ what a cosmically pleasing line “ their sweet moment poem born “ so beautiful how love can inspire and turn us into poets. Reminds me of lady gaga movie, forgot the name but remember the song “ always remember us this way” so heartfelt! Best wishes. Sending you light always

I Am Anaya

December 1, 2024 at 11:39 AM

Ah, yes "A Star Is Born" remade many times, dear poetess. Love does make us do things we've never done, in my case write a poem. I'm pleased that you found my little Tanka cosmic! Romance seems to be in the air :):) xo TY!

Robert Gorelick

December 1, 2024 at 10:32 AM

Covid surely up ended conventional habits and norms, as I read below on your comment to U.S. To quote Alice "Things are getting curiouser and curiouser" My best bestie, Robert

I Am Anaya

December 1, 2024 at 11:43 AM

Eager to know what what is, anything goes or is it all's fair in love and war! Ty for your reviews always my bestie. Winks and smiles

Andrea Dietrich

December 1, 2024 at 9:53 AM

This is very intriguing. So mysterious to me. I was going to comment on your stanzas but now I can see that you used only the last one. That is the one in tanka style. Well done.

I Am Anaya

December 1, 2024 at 11:44 AM

Ty, Andrea! I'm delighted you found it intriguing and mysterious, you read the stanzas I had posted in the notes and know how it began. Now taken down from notes. xo

Unseeking Seeker

November 30, 2024 at 7:19 PM

Interesting memory throwback of yesteryears

I Am Anaya

November 30, 2024 at 8:07 PM

Ty, US. I am delighted you found it interesting. A memory, a shrug of resignation. After covid had stricken the world. People acted in unusual ways, after the "stay in" and "away" period. It's been 3years on the soup! :):) I'm grateful for PS