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The First Time I Saw Her

The first time I saw her I was hooked She was stunning, beautiful, a looker I knew I had to have her in my life That she was available was the hooker. I knew her price was well beyond rubies But to me she was worth whatever the cost Totally smitten by her boldness, her appeal I bought my new Lamborghini automobile. SEVENTH PLACE WINNER Written June 23, 2021 for "Surprise Me" poetry contest sponsored by Charles Messina

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Date: 7/6/2021 2:14:00 PM
Nice Milt! Great surprise ending of your romance with a car! Congrats! Bravo! Arrivederci as you rumble down the road.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 7/6/2021 6:49:00 PM
I can only wish that I had the hard cash to purchase a luxury automobile like that. Not! But, it did make for a nice surprise ending. Thanks, Sam.
Date: 7/5/2021 6:39:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... expressing your "poetic humor." God bless you.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 7/5/2021 8:32:00 AM
Thanks so much for your sweet comment, Beata. If my poem were only true -sigh-.
Date: 7/3/2021 9:01:00 AM
Milton, out of all the poems written for the contest I think I read this one the most. Hilarious surprise ending that put a constant smile on my face. I love this...Congratulations on your win! All the very best.. Charlie
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 7/3/2021 9:29:00 AM
Thanks so much, Charlie. I appreciate your kind remarks and so glad you enjoyed the poem.
Date: 6/23/2021 12:09:00 PM
Lol, love the punchline Milton, love at first sight. Best of luck in the contest.. Tom
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/23/2021 12:19:00 PM
Thanks so much, Tom. Yep, too bad it's fiction!!! I could never afford one.
Date: 6/23/2021 10:11:00 AM
Wish you many enjoyable and safe miles on your new Lamborghini:) In my opinion, she's well worth it, and if she is, she will receive it. I think I like this great verse, too. Blessings and regards
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/23/2021 12:20:00 PM
See my note to Tom, Lasaad. A total pipedream!

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