The Final Fall

She called them the sad days

The wasted days

Hated days

Moving on days

 

He called them the hard days

The bad days

Sad days

Moving on days

 

She blamed him

Bloody men

Mental torture

Good riddance

 

He blamed her

Bloody women

No respect

Goodbye

 

She wanted love

Commitment

Wanted him

Needed him

 

He needed love

Needed space

Needed time

Wanted her

 

She couldn’t move on

Wouldn’t move on

Hated time

Hated him

 

He drank the bar

Numbed the pain

Saw the train

No need to explain

 

She took the call

Final fall

Found the pills

Ended it all.
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Date: 2/20/2024 9:32:00 AM
Congratulations on winning with this well constructed, imaginative poem Paul. Best wishes from Wen
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Paul Bell
Date: 2/21/2024 9:22:00 AM
Thanks Wen, cheery poem.
Date: 2/20/2024 6:08:00 AM
Dear Paul, the accuracy of this, made me smile and made my day while judging! Truly especially the lines “ She blamed him Bloody men Mental torture Good riddance He blamed her Bloody women No respect Goodbye” couldnt have said it any better! Spot on! What a brilliant and refreshing write! Congratulations on your win. Thank you for sharing
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Paul Bell
Date: 2/20/2024 8:53:00 AM
Thanks, Ink, they do say love can be fatal, and maybe should come with a health warning. Let that be a warning to lovers everywhere. For some reason, I always get dumped by text, women.
Date: 12/15/2022 1:03:00 PM
A sad variation of a "Romeo and Juliet." So many never realize until they have lost... others even then. Well done Paul :)
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Paul Bell
Date: 12/16/2022 3:05:00 AM
Yes, R&J were always going to implode.
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