Kelly Deschler Poet Rhyme

The Ferris Wheel

I can't describe just how I feel,
when I go round on a Ferris wheel,
the lights, they shine so bold and bright,
above the carnival grounds tonight.

My mood is uplifted into the air,
as my heart beats without a care,
I feel so free, as if I could fly,
with nothing between the ground and I.

The cool night wind flows in my hair,
the people look so small, way down there,
I hold my breath as I go over the top,
a feeling, surreal, I don't want to stop.

As fear escapes and I enjoy the ride,
I can't help but look down, over the side,
I am up among the stars and the moon,
an exciting feeling that ends, all too soon.

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Poet Destroyer A March 21, 2015 at 4:50 PM Thank you so much for the kind reply on my comment..PD

Arthur Vaso November 21, 2014 at 10:57 PM I loved this poem Kelly, but the title is pretty cool too ( hint hint ) :) Kelly Deschler November 25, 2014 at 1:19 AM Thank you, Arthur. I'm glad you liked this poem and it's title. (wink wink) ;)

Sneha Rv November 4, 2014 at 1:44 AM Amazing imagery!! I felt as if I was on it!! Sneha Kelly Deschler November 8, 2014 at 12:41 AM I'm happy that you liked it, Sneha! Thank you once again. I really appreciate your kind words.

Robin Davis September 26, 2014 at 7:22 AM Kelly A fun and care free write that takes me back to my younger days and all the fun carnivals and fairs brought. Thank you for the awesome comment on my Troubled Friend poem. Kelly Deschler October 2, 2014 at 1:39 AM This really was a fun subject to write about. I loved those carnivals when I was a kid, and I still do!.... I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem, Robin. Thank you for your wonderful comments. I appreciate it very much!

Edward Ebbs September 12, 2014 at 2:56 PM Nice, made me smile :) Kelly Deschler September 19, 2014 at 12:45 AM Thank you, Ed. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Maurice Yvonne September 7, 2014 at 6:57 PM Congratulations on your win. I love it in its simplicity however if others read into it all the better. Great works are usually layered which is always good. I HAVE ADDED THIS TO MY FAVS. I HOPE OTHERS DO THE SAME. Kelly Deschler September 13, 2014 at 12:48 AM Thank you for the nice comments and kind congrats, Maurice!.... My poems are usually pretty straightforward, but if others want to read more into it, then that's alright, too.... Thanks for faving this one, also! :)

Gordon Mcconnell September 4, 2014 at 8:43 AM fine penned piece Kelly, really nice flow with good rhyme but being from across the pond don't know about a 'ferris wheel' so you can explain later. have blessed day, Gordon Kelly Deschler September 8, 2014 at 2:25 AM Thank you very much for the nice comments, Gordon!.... A Ferris wheel is similar to the London Eye, only on a much smaller scale.

Andrea Dietrich September 3, 2014 at 11:35 PM pd. thinks you are comparing this to love. hmmm, why can't it just be about the ferris wheel? hahaha. I see you won a contest with this? BIG congrats.

Andrea Dietrich September 3, 2014 at 11:34 PM Kelly, I love love love carnival rides. Ferris wheel is a bit tame for me. But I know exactly the feeling you paint of being up there with the wind in your hair. Going to fairs and on rides is one of the things I miss MOST about my youth!

Poet Destroyer A September 3, 2014 at 9:15 PM Hi Kelly, wow.. what a ride! I was not sure, if you are comparing love, to a ferris wheel. If you are, you got it all perfect, for love is as scary as can be. also thrilling. Enjoyed...LINDA Kelly Deschler September 8, 2014 at 1:24 AM Hi Linda, I am glad you enjoyed the ride!.... I was not comparing a Ferris wheel to love, but I can see how my poem could be interpreted that way. Thank you for your great comments, as always. I do appreciate it!

Brenda Meier-Hans September 3, 2014 at 12:20 PM Congratulation Kelly on your win and this poem that takes us all on a ride. Kelly Deschler September 7, 2014 at 1:39 AM Thank you very much for the kind congrats, Brenda. I am happy that you enjoyed the ride! :)

Lucilla Carrillo September 1, 2014 at 11:15 PM Great poem Kelly. I can relate to this. The Ferris wheel was one of my favorite rides. It does give you that feeling of freedom. Thanks for sharing and God bless you... Lucilla Kelly Deschler September 6, 2014 at 12:27 AM Thank you very much, Lucilla. I really appreciate your nice comments!.... I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem and Ferris wheels, as well. I have loved them ever since I was a kid, and it has become somewhat of a tradition to ride on one each year, at the county fair.

Paul Callus September 1, 2014 at 3:32 PM Hi Kelly...I really enjoyed this write. It was only 2 years ago that I went for the first time on such a wheel when I was on Blackpool's pier. It was at night, so I can relate to how you feel in your poem. hugs. // paul Kelly Deschler September 5, 2014 at 1:26 PM Hi Paul, I have loved Ferris wheels since I was a kid. In fact, I was on one about 2 weeks ago, and I think that inspired this poem. A Ferris wheel just makes you feel so alive and carefree, like when I was young.... Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I appreciate it very much!

Carolyn Devonshire September 1, 2014 at 2:10 PM Dear Kelly, your joy flows so well throughout this poem. It's like the reader is right there with you atop the ferris wheel's highest carriage. Also want to compliment you on the co-write you did with Paul. Excellent! Love, Carolyn Kelly Deschler September 5, 2014 at 1:08 PM Thank you for the wonderful comments, Carolyn. I appreciate it so much! I'm happy that you've enjoyed this poem, as well as my collaboration with Paul. He is such a nice person to work with!

Ravi Sathasivam September 1, 2014 at 7:22 AM Excellent. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs Kelly Deschler September 3, 2014 at 9:01 PM Thank you very much, Ravi.

Keith Merritt August 31, 2014 at 1:58 PM It was like flying, the first time I rode a Ferris Wheel ! Age 5 and every nerve ending on fire...memories ! Thanks, Kelly ! Kelly Deschler September 3, 2014 at 1:30 AM I was around 10 years old when I rode a Ferris wheel for the first time. I was terrified, but I loved it! Since then, I've wanted to ride on one at least once every year. In fact, I was just on a Ferris wheel about two weeks ago at the county fair, and I think it inspired me to write this poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Keith!

Robert Lindley August 31, 2014 at 11:41 AM I enjoyed this poem today!! I asked my first wife to marry me at the top of a Ferris Wheel that had stopped to let passengers off. She said yes and gave me a kiss that didn't stop until the Wheel jolted into motion again! That was 41 years ago. Kelly Deschler September 3, 2014 at 1:13 AM A nice romantic moment, Robert! I think a lot of good memories are made on Ferris wheels. I was on one about 2 weeks ago at the county fair, and it just inspired me to pick up my pen and write. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem, my friend!