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The End of Love

We lie together, you there, me here. I reach for you and you, melting into your pillow, pull away turning slowly, your message is clear, there is nothing, just emotional disarray. Under the darkening sky I whisper to you, the words but an echo in the fading light. I listen to the clock tick, our lives askew. The dysphonic sound echos our plight. The more I love you, the less you care. My passion swelters, my anger flares, but with melting indifference, you just lie there as the hole in my heart continually tears. Your love a landscape of stark indifference as time melts slow into the night. Me, I'm lost, somewhere out in the distance, and you, just out of frame, hide in plain sight, ...as time melts slow into the fading light.
05/07/16 Based on Salvador Dali's "The Persistence of Memory"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Gauthier Avatar
November 10, 2017 at 5:44 AM
So sad - well captured
Inman Avatar
November 10, 2017 at 5:48 AM
Thank you Line.
Neumann Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 9:46 AM
PS: I also never heard of that poetry form, but then I struggle with a sonnet...But I got a prompt and will dip into Dali. Thank you.
Inman Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 8:15 PM
Thanks for both comments Kai. I'm happy you found something relatable in the poem.
Neumann Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 9:44 AM
I really like that and can relate.Your poem speaks to me...
Hicks Avatar
May 19, 2016 at 12:40 PM
You found inspiration in such a thought provoking painting. The sadness is the sense of a stalemate in the relationship ... both going nowhere quickly, as time keeps melting ... well perceived piece of writing, James. It intrigued me.
Inman Avatar
May 19, 2016 at 4:50 PM
Thanks Timothy, a nice interpretation. We have a Salvador Dali Museum near where I live. It's been a while since I've been there but it is pretty impressive. They do not have "The Persistence of Memory" but they do have "The Disintegration of Persistence of Memory" a similar painting.
Manassian Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 11:59 AM
This is a profound piece. You say so much in those lines...the heartache is palpable. Congrats.
Inman Avatar
May 18, 2016 at 9:48 AM
Thank you for the great comment Eileen.
Dietrich Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 8:38 PM
Congrats on this one. Not sure your placement but I hope it was a GOOD one.
Inman Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 11:45 PM
Thanks Andrea.
Ashe Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 3:35 PM
James, First , Thank You for your visit and comment on my poem! I saw this and was intrigued with this form and when I saw Salvador Dali's painting now coupled with this write it all comes together perfectly! I will enjoy reading your extensive library of writings! Thank You Sir!
Inman Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 8:36 PM
Thank you for the kind comment Walter.
A   Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 2:27 AM
James, congratulations on your wonderful win. LINDA
Inman Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 8:34 PM
Thank you PD
Raven Avatar
May 10, 2016 at 8:39 AM
Hi James, an excellent write. I haven't even seen this form yet. The poem itself is beautiful and creative. The journey of your pen flows down the page and your words sing. This is worthy of the seven and the fave i give it....Mike.
Inman Avatar
May 10, 2016 at 9:23 AM
Thanks Mike, you're too kind.
Dietrich Avatar
May 9, 2016 at 3:19 PM
wow, you took that theme to a whole other level using a person as the theme for that picture. This is a GREAT interpretation for that strange picture. I really like it. Wonderful job.
Inman Avatar
May 9, 2016 at 6:22 PM
Thank you Andrea.
Vaso Avatar
May 8, 2016 at 11:46 PM
This poem is amazing! :)
Inman Avatar
May 9, 2016 at 4:41 AM
A wonderful comment Arthur, thank you.
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