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The empty words

 Desperate.. how can you be with someone and not love them. Desperate.. your heart is empty. Are you lonely? Desperate.. is it true? A shallow word? An empty meaning? Desperate..Desperate..Desperate, is it a rumor, the spread of words that ruin lifes. Am i invisable? I'm here. Standing in front of you. Maybe my glasses are blocking your view. I can change.. I'm not desperate. I'm in love, but then again what is love? An empty word. An empty meaning.. A rumor? 

a poem by LeannW.Brown 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 1/31/2018 2:07:00 PM
Hello Stephanie, What is love? A feeling of affection for each other. Love each other for whom they are, not changing each other. Love is acceptance is accepting each other for each other. have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 1/19/2018 10:43:00 AM
Stepanie, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this marvelous community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I TOO am ready to enjoy and follow you and your poetry if you'd like :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup 2018 :) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 1/12/2018 3:10:00 PM
Moving poem. Well done, Leann.
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Date: 1/12/2018 10:33:00 AM
This is so deep and I'm so glad I'm reading this right now :)
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Date: 1/6/2018 4:40:00 AM
You are young, love changes with age.. You will see that... I agree with the other two, maybe look at the formatting of the poem... It is a good idea to read other poems on here, that always helps... Welcome to poetry soup...
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Date: 1/5/2018 8:20:00 PM
I honestly love the message of this poem. The only critique I could find is to format it differently, like how you would say it in your head. But I am a young beginner too, and I hope to see more from you in the future.
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Stephanie Ward
Date: 1/5/2018 8:24:00 PM
Thank you for taking your time to comment. You have no idea how much your comment means to me. I'm only in middle school, and currently trying to find something that fits my interest. I get comments from my teachers telling me that I'm a good writer. I really hope this is the way to go because it really makes me happy to express the way I feel but to make others take their time and think about it.
Date: 1/5/2018 11:40:00 AM
Maybe you're a little fed-up with the bureaucracy of love...you want the real thing... Nice poem...I would format it differently... Like... Desperate Desperate Desperate Can you be with someone and not love them Lonely lonely lonely with an empty heart is that true... By formatting, you will figure out the structure of the wording... If I can I will help...Try and format it differently
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Stephanie Ward
Date: 1/5/2018 4:57:00 PM
Thank you so much for the feedback, I'm glad you understood the meaning of the poem, and I will definitely use your advise.
Date: 1/4/2018 9:26:00 PM
Please give me feedback on my poem. I'm young but I feel that writing is really something for me.
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