Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

The Eclipse of Sanity

Howling winds flung me into the sea
waves lashed kelp ropes around me
my belligerence grew when I was seized
anger brewed the tighter they squeezed

With fists raised and teeth clenched
I resisted the harder they wrenched
voice rang out in acrimonious scream 
my face contorted, wild eyes agleam
spittle dribbled from cracked lips
I neared the verge of sanity's eclipse

Man is but an elfin grain of sand
a mortal never has the upper hand
when wrangling with a sea of thunder
I was punished and plowed asunder
beneath coral reefs to ocean's floor
I cursed until I could no more

My swearing wails echoed my destiny
retched was my body from an angry sea 
briny foam spit me on the rocky shore
done with me like an oft beaten whore
My crime was that I'd chosen wrong
the one I loved became my swan song

Piercing needles of torrential rain
burning injections increased the pain
Such bitter tea the cruel sea can steep
and I, a crumpet, tossed in restless sleep

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Bill Baker March 27, 2024 at 10:49 PM The terrifying struggles in life were well displayed in this tale of the raw emotion and pain of choices we make in life. The metaphor of the sea was excellent, Lin. My soul resonated with your struggle with the angry sea and the pain and suffering that life can dish out. All we can do is fight through and never give up, my dear friend. That closing verse, I really enjoyed, especially the last two lines, "Such bitter tea the cruel sea can steep and I, a crumpet, tossed in restless sleep." Lin Lane April 2, 2024 at 8:11 AM Hi Bill. Thanks an awful lot for your commentary on this one. Sometimes we have to admit our weaknesses and move on as best we can. I apologize for not replying sooner.

Jay Narain March 27, 2024 at 11:03 AM A nice poem with lots of imagery and poetic intensity. Well written. Lin Lane March 27, 2024 at 3:09 PM Thank you for your insightful remarks, Jay.

Daniel Turner March 26, 2024 at 7:32 PM You win some, you lose some, and some get rained out. Your poetic prowess on full display with this one Lin. Such is love. Sometimes it can be very cruel. Lin Lane March 27, 2024 at 3:09 PM Such is love and the good and bad emotions that it brings and takes away from us. It's really good to see you commenting on my poetry, Danny. Thank you.

Jan Allison March 26, 2024 at 3:22 PM Such intense imagery Lin, I especially love "Man is but an elfin grain of sand a mortal never has the upper hand when wrangling with a sea of thunder I was punished and plowed asunder beneath coral reefs to ocean's floor I cursed until I could no more" excellent poetry as ever my friend:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane March 27, 2024 at 3:07 PM We are nothing in the realm of the world, Jan. You are still my #1 cheerleader! Hugs

Daniel Henry Rodgers March 26, 2024 at 9:16 AM Dear Lin, I loved how you plunged us into the depths of human turmoil with striking imagery and raw emotion. The struggle against forces beyond our control, symbolized by the relentless sea. Your portrayal of belligerence and resistance reflects the universal battle against fate. Ahhh the fleeting nature of life's struggles and the power of acceptance. Lin, I really liked this one.- Blessings, my friend, Daniel Lin Lane March 27, 2024 at 3:06 PM Hi Daniel. The plunge of often quick, but the saving and recovery is a slow process that never quite heals without a scar. Thank you for taking the swim with me in these lines.

Paula Goldsmith March 26, 2024 at 9:11 AM WOW!!! What a sad Rhyme write/story. I enjoyed reading this one. Love your line, "My crime was that I'd chosen wrong the one I loved became my swan song." The questions is, why do we do this??? Have a great/wonderful day.................. Lin Lane March 27, 2024 at 3:05 PM Hello dear Paula and thanks so very much for your kind comments. The answer can only be found in our hearts. They want what they want.