The Dying Slave

Slumped in his nakedness,
His loose...left hand, 
Runs its shaky fingers through his hair.

With his eyes closed,
His subordinate dreams
Are shackled across his chest,
As he struggles with his toiled reality.





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Inspired by the Dying Slave
By Michelangelo
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 1:01 PM
Very nicely portrayed!!
Owens Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 7:07 AM
Love your description...Marty
Chircop Avatar
February 11, 2010 at 2:53 PM
I can feel the scent of death..the pain of slavery..a good one indeed Raul..I love Micelangelo too,He's Grand--Charma
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February 11, 2010 at 12:24 PM
Powerful poem capturing the struggle and the agony of slavery. Wow! Your talent shines in this poem. Thank you for sharing it and for choosing my poem as one of your contest winners. Blessings to you. Karen
Richards Avatar
February 11, 2010 at 7:46 AM
Ahh....I can see it so clearly. You have made this come alive with flesh and emotion. Wonderfully descriptive, Raul! Love, Carrie. (ps..being on Calif time, I'm always late in seeing the contest results, but what a treat to wake this morning to see my poem won in your B.B.King contest. I thank you so much...and I thank you for your ongoing support, and the wonderful challenges!! Thanks again Raul!!
Kross Avatar
February 11, 2010 at 5:55 AM
Beautifully tragic. Thanks for sharing.
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
February 11, 2010 at 5:47 AM
Raul. Your words here are a beautiful expression. Knowing...empathizing...showing the struggles of toil and slavery. Michelangelo sent the message and you have put it well into words. Very nice. Lovingly, Dane Ann
Sweetheart Avatar
February 11, 2010 at 5:24 AM
Magnificent words to compliment the painting.. thankxxx for your wonderful expressions in poetry always.. another masterpiece.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
Pickett Avatar
February 11, 2010 at 4:29 AM
Great description.... Nice...:JP]
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