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The Ditch Became Abyss - Collaboration With Tim Smith

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THE DITCH BECAME ABYSS: 
Collaboration with Tim Smith

When I was here
All the music sang lalala
I only saw your eyes

When you were here
All the words read you you you
and all made sense

When we were here
In a different life, the river flowed
rippling love around us

Now without a we
No longer captured in a breeze
The ditch became abyss

Now without you here
All my days are blue blue blue
and my senses darken too

Now without me here
my head is spinning round round round
no longer seeing out clouded eyes

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January 4, 2016
Tim Smith
Darren White
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Date: 1/4/2017 5:28:00 PM
Is this what they mean by 'Life's a Ditch', lol,Charmys right, this is very lyrical, well done to both. Take care, Richard
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Darren White
Date: 1/5/2017 12:29:00 AM
Life's a ditch LOL. Thank you, Richard :)
Date: 1/4/2017 5:09:00 PM
Wow guys!!! Your did an amazing job with this poem! Great collaboration! Loved :)
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Darren White
Date: 1/5/2017 12:29:00 AM
Thanks Clau, this was very good to do :) It's a beautiful poem I think and I can hear music in it.
Date: 1/4/2017 2:47:00 PM
Wow, two of my favorite poets in one spot, how cool is that. You two did a great job with this, It's hard to even tell, the stanzas were seamless and so well done. Bravo Darren and Tim.
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Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 2:51:00 PM
Thank you! This was our first. I hope more will follow because I like it a lot :)
Date: 1/4/2017 2:47:00 PM
Your poem is like a song to my ears Darren and Timothy : ).A fave.Fabulous Collab.
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Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 2:53:00 PM
Wow. Fave. Thank you Charmaine :) For me it is a song yes, inspired by a song.
Date: 1/4/2017 2:05:00 PM
A very nice collaboration piece! Best to both of you :)
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Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 2:30:00 PM
Thank you, Akkina :)
Date: 1/4/2017 12:56:00 PM
This worked out great Darren. A pleasure writing with you.
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Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 12:59:00 PM
I enjoyed this very much indeed, and I love the result :)
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