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The Deception of Sugar

Sugar Deception

My diet’s going well
she said
Telltale crumbs
in her bed.

Kathryn Collins
February 6, 2014

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Tamara M. Kohlstaedt

Date: 5/8/2016 12:26:00 AM

Gave up on dieting long ago -- have a HUGE sweet tooth --- but this sounds like something I might have done once upon a time :)

Karl Marszalowicz

Date: 7/24/2014 6:02:00 AM

what promise. Tell me of what kind of crumbs though. pop corn kernels popping thoughts about what else you can snack on. live it up! smear those sheets against your cheeks with gram cracker bits You want s'more I want s'more.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/20/2014 12:15:00 PM

Hey, I need to tell you . I think you were hacked, your email account. I'll explain in a soupmail.

Gwen Benita Mason Gibbs

Date: 3/23/2014 8:56:00 AM

Cute, I think thats the way most diets go.

Kathryn Collins
Date: 3/23/2014 5:09:00 PM

Yup

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 3/10/2014 2:33:00 PM

Yeah... most everyone cheats on their diet, all the while proclaiming how well they're doing. (You might consider using 'sprinkles' instead of 'crumbs' for the overall flow.) Great title... cute little poem!! Love, Keith xoxo

Kathryn Collins
Date: 3/23/2014 5:09:00 PM

you ARE on my favorites list. Always have been. XXX OOO

Kathryn Collins
Date: 3/13/2014 11:12:00 AM

Thanks Keith -- I soooo like your suggestion. Two syllables are appropriate. I'm catching up on responses then to my favorites for a treat. xxx's ooo's Kathy