The Darkened Sky Stole My Tears

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Darkness devours my miserly despondent room.
Wide windows covered shutting all luminous light
A taciturn thief that stole even the stars.
I sigh, a sudden suffering, it steals my sorrow from my eyes.
“The Darkened Sky Stole My Tears.”  


She had left for good, no reason given.
Sorrowful soreness cling to my weary heart.
I feel a dreadful dirge hurting inside my breast,
My humble heart dances a worthless wake.
And still no sign of a flash of light in the dark.

My heart beats an echo of an illogic rhythm.
A mournful lullaby comes and goes in my head.
I curse the hush of darkened air, desperate echoes.
The mournful dirge suddenly flickers light
Through louvers and then I find my dreadful tears.

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Date: 5/30/2025 9:20:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a powerful "The Darkened Sky Stole My Tears" write. I enjoyed reading this one. Great Picture.... Have a blessed day/weekend with your win.......
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Date: 5/30/2025 8:41:00 AM
Very nicely penned Victor, Congrats on your win
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Date: 5/30/2025 9:15:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 5/29/2025 8:15:00 PM
Victor, your poetry is so beautiful that it moves me deeply. Back with Congratulations on your win
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Date: 5/29/2025 8:11:00 PM
Hard when no reason is given. Darkness devours, stolen stars and tears, even….
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Date: 5/29/2025 12:26:00 AM
Dear Victor, this is an emotional write, I know how it feels when darkened night’s steal one’s tears in times of trouble and fears… Beryl
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Date: 5/28/2025 10:21:00 PM
This is so sad. The image you shared with this poem is also sad. I feel like you wrote the story of pain in the young man of your shared picture's sorrowful eyes.
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Date: 5/28/2025 9:57:00 AM
Hello Victor, this is sad but beautifully written. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 5/26/2025 2:59:00 PM
Victor, your remarkable poem describes a sadness which defies tears. An interesting and dark poem, though I'm glad light was beginning to break through at the end. :)
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Date: 5/26/2025 2:34:00 PM
Sometimes shedding tears can be a good thing, a cleansing ritual that eases the heart dear Victor, very well written :)
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Date: 5/26/2025 1:40:00 PM
If you penned these gorgeous lines before you read my poem then perhaps it's why you were down. These are lines of longing and so poetic written by your pen, my friend. This is a poem that lingers. Poetry hugs and mail ... CayCay
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Date: 5/26/2025 1:23:00 PM
No happy ending in this sad tale. Nice use of alliteration Victor
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Date: 5/26/2025 12:52:00 PM
"he mournful dirge suddenly flickers light Through louvers and then I find my dreadful tears." Wow! A slam-dunk ending. You may have winner here.
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Date: 5/26/2025 12:46:00 PM
Wow. Outstanding work with that line in the contest. Bet this scored high
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Date: 5/26/2025 11:55:00 AM
Victor, your outstanding poem evokes a deep and moving depiction of love gone by, with its enveloping sadness. Very movingly penned, as if from the point of view of someone experiencing excruciating mental distress. Best wishes
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Date: 5/26/2025 11:24:00 AM
A very poignant and soulfully moving poem dear Victor, so well expressed from the perspective of one that is in so deep emotional pain, youv delivered that so well in such an emotive manner. Your use of the prompt here is brilliant! Pleasure reading your poem! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/26/2025 10:36:00 AM
Dear Victor, the embracing melancholy of your verse paints a soulful, mournful, emotional portrait of love lost. I was immersed in the darkness and the tears. Such sadness so beautifully expressed. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/26/2025 9:42:00 AM
- A deep sorrow in the darkness, Victor - There is always light at the end of the tunnel we have been told, some tunnels are just longer than others - Lovely written, good luck in the contest :) - hugs
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