The Crosses In Your Eyes

Wretched Stakes

I find in your eyes a mysterious universe
fraught with the searing scent of betrayal
and warped reflections of my reality
swirling in shadows of welling, yet un-shed tears.

Rummaging the tortured abyss for a glint of familiarity,
grasping to anchor myself in the alien terrain,
I'm awestruck by the requisite strength; your strength...
to survive among the crosses in your eyes.

Over the horizon a faint glimmer defies the gloom.
A hopeful star, fading but stalwart,
screams for love as it grapples the swallowing deep.
At last, I fathom the wretched stakes.

07/26/15
Submission for Contest: The Crosses in Your Eyes
Hosted: Justin Bordner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 7/27/2015 6:14:00 PM
I am glad I found this gem..It says so much.. The strength to survive among the crosses of your eyes..I am in love with this line..Adding it to my favs -Charma
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Date: 7/27/2015 10:35:00 PM
Thank you for the kind feedback, I appreciate you taking the time stop by and comment.
Date: 7/27/2015 5:05:00 PM
Excellent take on this theme, Preston. There is a lot at stake here, and it's the eyes that reflect what's going on in your lives. gl in the contest. // paul
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Date: 7/27/2015 10:34:00 PM
Hi Paul, thanks for stopping by to read.
Date: 7/27/2015 8:10:00 AM
Preston, such powerful words that brings solid pictures!!! Your use of poetical devices is awesome...!!!! Well-written!~Olive ELoisa .... =')
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Date: 7/27/2015 10:33:00 PM
Thanks Olive, for your feedback, I appreciate your encouragement.
Date: 7/26/2015 10:39:00 PM
Write back atcha. Not sure I grasp each nuance, but these are bold and rich with power. Thanks too for visiting my Howl. Gerald Oliver
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Date: 7/26/2015 7:00:00 PM
This is good, Preston. In just three verses you captured the entire story of betrayal, conflict and the glimmer of hope for forgiveness. This should do well in the contest. Kim
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Date: 7/26/2015 9:38:00 PM
Thanks Kim. I appreciate the feedback, and it's interesting to see what you pulled from this. Thank you for taking the time to comment. =)
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