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The Creation

The empty house murmured of loneliness and sorrow. Its feelings bled, covered, and asphyxiated the divine soul Of a man who lived for a cured tomorrow. The remedy for this affliction sat alone; only it could console. In one corner, where trickles of light could rain through. It was a magical creation with only one goal. It brought forth a new resistance, gave the man a better view. With the creation he could defeat the evil pain. Long and hard the man worked with the creation, and the magic grew. The cure swam through the air, entangled and wrapped like a chain. Soon the house began to lighten and warm. The man and the creation stopped, but knew the evil had been slain. The man took a step back; the creation began to transform. He shook his head - it had been and always will be a piano. The sickness couldn't touch him; all he had to do was perform.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 2/4/2009 9:58:00 AM
Dear Sara, Transformation can often bring beauty, change is not always bad. You won with such uplifting verse. I would like to send you a copy of my last book for your prize. I can be reached by email on this site. Let me know where to send your prize!!! Light & Love Debbie
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Date: 1/22/2009 8:03:00 AM
Sara congratulations on placing third in Debbie's contest - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 1/9/2009 5:53:00 PM
Congratulations Sara on your win in Debbie's contest! Well done! Love, Shar
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Date: 1/9/2009 12:09:00 AM
Congratulations, Sara, on your well deserved Third Place Win in Debbie's inspiring contest. Love, Nigel
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Date: 12/27/2008 10:11:00 AM
Sara - Congratulations on your feature this week! Wishing you a Happy & Healthy New Year. Peace always, John
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Date: 12/25/2008 2:10:00 PM
Sara - I just wanted to stop by and welcome you to the Soup – Merry Christmas & God Bless, MJ
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Date: 12/24/2008 3:45:00 PM
Made in the image of our Creator it is surely a gift to be given the ability to create wether it is through music, writing, painting, cooking and all the other wonderful gifts of our life!! What a wonderful write you have here Sara and a very well-deserved one to be a feature here at the Soup! Congratulations!
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Date: 12/23/2008 6:12:00 PM
Congratulations Sara on the featuring of "The Creation." Vince
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Date: 12/22/2008 9:00:00 PM
Congrats on being featured this week, Happy Holidays...Raul
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Date: 12/22/2008 2:19:00 PM
Wonderful uplifting life affirming verse. Art, writting, music all have the ability to create & transform. Thank you for showing we can always choose to create beauty. Consider entering this in my contest the Beauty Way please. Light & Love Debbie Guzzi Happy Holy Days
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Date: 12/22/2008 10:25:00 AM
You could not imagine how deeply I relate to this. Such beauty in your lines....Best wishes, Sara:)
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Date: 12/22/2008 8:34:00 AM
Sara, I enjoyed the creative imagination you have composed and shared with us here as your talent as a writer is glowing. Congratulations for being featured as I say well done. May your holiday be safe and filled with happiness... MPK
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Date: 12/22/2008 12:27:00 AM
Sara - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – Merry Christmas & God Bless, MJ
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Date: 12/21/2008 3:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your featured write of the week! Warmest wishes for a beautiful holiday! Love, Shar
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Date: 12/19/2008 3:04:00 AM
It is great that you tacle this most musical of form. I like the narrative of this and the poem twists it for each bit of feeling. However '. . . entangled and wrapped like a chain' doesn't make any sense perhaps it should be 'in' instead of 'and'?
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Date: 12/18/2008 1:38:00 AM
You've created a most interesting piece , here , Sara ... Welcome to the " Soup " , and enjoy !!!! ....
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