S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Poet Iambic Pentameter

The Corona Catastrophe

Silently shrill 
a silent chill 
seems to have run down the spine 
of our blue planet windmill 
So many deceased 
Too many ill 
mounting and surmounting 
 the hospital bill 
Breathing for many 
 is like climbing uphill 
or like panting on 
your home treadmill 
And it's frightening when 
there is nil a pill.
A minute invisible 
virus doth kill .
Pray to God for mercy 
bow and kneel! 
Many are dying 
 without a will 
 It's safer to stay home
 by the window sill 
The world seems to have come 
to a standstill 
You now have time to sharpen
your poetic quill 
In lockdown pray 
and ink still spill 
You may hone 
your poetic skill 
Until the virus 
has had its fill. 
Corona they say feels like drowning 
like a fish without a gill 
for we can't breathe 
like the eel or krill. 
In mouths hot water 
flush and swill 
Exterminate this virus? 
only God can and will.

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Darlene De Beaulieu October 22, 2021 at 4:38 PM Hello S. Zaynab Kamoopuri, The virus is everywhere. Everyone must be careful. to stay heathy. We have to do the best we can in a situation like this. enjoy your evening my friend.

David Scott January 22, 2021 at 9:34 PM Well loVe the write you created well penned perfect blown away very poetic xx davidsxott

Geoffrey Brewer August 31, 2020 at 2:58 AM An expressive but depressed, submissive view of the current situation. You have a natural way with words that shows a love of language. By the way, where is the ‘Iambic Pentameter’ in it?

Line Gauthier August 29, 2020 at 4:57 AM great expression of our times, well done.

Jennifer Proxenos August 29, 2020 at 1:04 AM Corona is a deadly virus , hundreds of thousands have died. This virus is not sudden, it creeps up on you making you feel worse until you can't breath. we have stayed at home with the occasional quick necessary trip out with masks and gloves. Yesterday was my birthday, we went to my sons with masks no hugs, six meters social distancing. But it was a treat to see them both. Hugs and blessing Zaynab, you write beautifully. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer

Besma Riabi Dziri June 25, 2020 at 9:50 AM A "sharpened poetic quill" in a harsh time does ink spill.. a poem of a great message.. a deep faith and a strong belief in empowered souls and in Almighty God! A great work! S great pleasure to read, Zaynab! My deepest regards and blessings.

Silent One June 23, 2020 at 5:09 PM I thought I had commented on this brilliant poem...You write some great poems.

Swetha Vangaveti May 25, 2020 at 2:43 PM It's better to stay safe and it's also the only time to hone your skills!! Very well said.

Lindsay Laurie April 22, 2020 at 8:42 PM Hello zaynab … a clear picture poem of how an enemy forcing humanity to combine as one to fight. Short lines taking me straight to the point that I enjoyed zaynab - Lindsay S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 25, 2020 at 4:02 AM Yeah it's nice that the world is united in helping to overcome this adversity and affliction. Warm thanks for comment, stay safe!

M. L. Kiser April 22, 2020 at 10:54 AM So true, it's sad though that this has spread so far,to so many. The world is not a happy place right now. Blessings. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 22, 2020 at 3:41 PM Ah yeah spread to so many the world over, the whole big world is scared and is humbled by a minuscule virus. Hope n praying it ends soon, if we live be thankful if we die we go to heaven if we believe in it. Stay safe, best wishes.

Winged Warrior April 21, 2020 at 5:42 AM Very well crafted my friend...you bring much awareness...this situation is many catastrophes all at once...we must pray...stay safe...the Wingster :o) S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 21, 2020 at 8:14 AM Oh yes it is, though there are positives to be learned from it. Yeah prayer is a necessity. Warm thanks for comment, stay safe!

Pashang Salehi April 21, 2020 at 1:13 AM Your words need no praise, it is the truth. Your way of looking around is awesome but sad. nice write... S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 21, 2020 at 2:28 AM Yeah I like to hear of poets thoughts than praise , . Yeah these are sad times when so many are dying in the world, ESP if some are not going to heaven because they didn't believe in one. Warm thanks and I'm wondering if I read yours recently.

Michael Burch April 20, 2020 at 8:36 PM You have a nice touch with meter and rhyme, and your poem captures much of the current catastrophe. One suggestion: In English with many singular nouns dropping a required article results in "extreme awkwardness." For example, we would say "mounting and surmounting hospital bills" [plural] but "mounting and surmounting the hospital bill" [singular]. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 21, 2020 at 2:25 AM Hi , ok I get your constructive criticism of my forgetting 'the' , let me see if edits work coz last time edits wasn't working for me. Thanks so much for kind feedback. Stay safe!

Constance La France April 20, 2020 at 5:00 PM Zaynab, you asked and I came to read your poem, wonderfully penned, you have skill as a writer, and I am wondering what country you come from. We have the Covid 19 quite bad in Canada, but at least we have Goverment paid healthcare _Constance S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 21, 2020 at 2:22 AM Cont/..Hi dear, I hail from an Arabian, Mesopotamian and Indian ethnic background but currently settled in Tanzania. Take care and stay safe, warm thanks for comment. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 21, 2020 at 2:20 AM Hi dear, yeah we do have govt paid healthcare as well but some prefer private hospitals where you have to pay, though I was actually referring to other countries and how it is also costing the health industry and govt paying the bills, that's why I wrote surmounting .

Andrea Dietrich April 20, 2020 at 4:27 PM I have my own opinions on this whole thing and the reason for it being upon us. Anyway, I do enjoy the mesmerizing way that you patterned your thoughts and made us FEEL your fear and sadness. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 21, 2020 at 2:14 AM Hi, dear friend, I would so like to know your reason for it being on us, some blame the Chinese, some blame Americans, I don't know who to believe more. I have sadness for the parts of the world that are badly affected by it, and we do have fears of this deadly virus spreading to the whole world completely even though where I live we have had only 4 deaths. Take care and stay safe.

Mystic Rose Rose April 20, 2020 at 3:33 PM Only God can finally put down his hand and say enough, thank you for sharing, a wonderful poem well written be safe , S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 3:38 PM Oh yes indeed. Warmest thanks for a bright great comment! Take care and stay safe!

Gideon Foli April 20, 2020 at 2:00 PM Wow I was blown away reading your poem on COVID-19. Awesomely impressive Zaynab. This will be a great for spoken word. I love the rhyme too. Love and hugs! S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 2:21 PM Thanks soo much poet for nice comment. I'm prompted to check yours out as well. Stay safe, best wishes.

Jennifer Proxenos April 20, 2020 at 12:08 PM Amen to your breathtaking poem Zaynab - poetic talent here for sure. Blessings my friend, Jennifer. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 2:20 PM Warmest thanks for comment, let's take a deep breath ah. Take care and stay safe.

Eve Roper April 20, 2020 at 11:33 AM I am glad you directed me to the your poem, great way to make a statement. This virus is making everyone insane. Keep safe and well. Hugs Eve S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 2:18 PM Warm thanks eve, yeah it's driving many crazy this virus ahh. Stay safe, take care.

Sarah Hassarati April 20, 2020 at 8:11 AM Very clever writing with a almost a heartbeat rhythm. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 9:12 AM Warmest Thanks for a great poetic comment! Take care sis.

Paul Callus April 20, 2020 at 7:24 AM Your verse in rhyme and its topical content is worthy of praise, Zaynab. It's our duty to look after our health and that of others. Let's put our trust in medical people and above all in God for a positive solution. ~ Regards // paul S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 9:11 AM Yes you are so right, above all on God the healer and gratitude to the medical staff helping everywhere. Thanks soo much for such a bright positive comment!

Gordon Mcconnell April 20, 2020 at 6:27 AM Fine write Zaynab, good rhyme and flow with very apt to our world situation. Trust you're keeping well. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 9:08 AM Hi Gordon, thanks soo much for feedback. I'm well thank God up to now. Hope you are too. Cheers and stay safe!

Jenish Somadas April 20, 2020 at 5:43 AM Wonderful rhyme...And the theme is apt to the situation we are in.. Great write Zaynab.. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri April 20, 2020 at 9:05 AM I'm glad it's apt. Warm thanks for comment. Take care! ??