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The Clouded Window of Time

Why, does existing have to be
burdensome. My mortal thoughts flee
like rain drumming at my window, 
then trickles releasing a dam 
leaving me brittle to exam
my own conscious; what do I know. 
Surpassing life hopes as I winch
loneliness devours inch by inch.
My lips quake and swell at my low
detaching my dying cinder.
I can't take another winter
confronted with the ebb and flow,

not being able to foresee 
mental skills decline as I grow
old and suppose to comfort me.



6/12/2018

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Heidi Sands

Date: 6/14/2018 10:13:00 AM

Well expressed Eve. Many can relate to :)

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 6/14/2018 8:21:00 AM

You have described your emotions really beautifully. No matter how sad it is, his is the truth and one day our this life shall end, but don t worry, after it anotjer life will start,which shall never end, hope to see you there, good luck

Agnes Krampe

Date: 6/13/2018 3:28:00 PM

Your poem depicted the sorrows of aging very well, Eve. I hope you are not really feeling so sad, but of you do, I am sending gentle hugs.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/13/2018 3:25:00 PM

A very touching poem, Eve, and one to which many can relate. When we're young, we have drive and ambition that seems to fade later in life. I, too, know that lonely feeling. Be comforted by the fact that you reach out and touch many lives here. You are an important member of the Soup community. Knowing this helps us get through the loneliness. Truly, a sad but beautiful poem that acknowledges the changes that come in later stages of life. Thanks for sharing, Carolyn

Mike Gentile

Date: 6/13/2018 1:38:00 PM

Eve, you have really expressed this feeling in a very relatable write. I really enjoyed reading it and reminding myself that we are all in this together xxoo

Silent One

Date: 6/13/2018 11:24:00 AM

expressed with deep emotion Eve...

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 6/13/2018 2:47:00 AM

Excellent write. Expressed well emotionally. Thanks for sharing it

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/13/2018 12:30:00 AM

Great write Eve, sadly we all become less sharp as the clock ticks. Tom

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/13/2018 3:27:00 PM

When you think about it, we become sharper in some ways as we are not racing as much to meet deadlines. The "right brain" seems to become more attuned. Hugs, Carolyn