The Change In Me

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Contestf: Let’s Minichu on Fear Sponsor: Mohan Chutan

19 September 2023

At dusk shall hatch the seed They creep from cracks to sever, mutilate and shred And they breed Then feed - insane Their banquet lies within my head Warm brain Mind - ill But not yet dead Kill At dusk shall hatch the seed Their banquet lies within my head Kill

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Karen Jones

Date: 9/23/2023 2:00:00 PM

Cranial and spooky. Fun for Halloween!

Terry Flood
Date: 9/23/2023 3:22:00 PM

Thanks, Karen. I’d bet when Halloween draws near, my pen will be struck dumb.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/23/2023 6:40:00 AM

Dark read Terry - rather psychotic inside that head! Love it! :)

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 9/24/2023 9:14:00 AM

I'm not fond of a lot of rules either Terry. I just want to write (hopefully good) poetry that appeals to at least a few. :) This poem of yours, however, turned out great! Love your belligerent streak! :)

Terry Flood
Date: 9/23/2023 3:26:00 PM

Took a while, Lin. I kept discovering yet another rule I hadn’t adhered to. Normally, with too many rules I decide the contest isn’t worth the effort, but I stuck with this one out of sheer belligerence. Terry

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/21/2023 7:01:00 PM

It would starve to death inside my head for it will find no trace of brain matter there. Such a creative description of this zombieesque creature. Good luck in the contest my friend.

Terry Flood
Date: 9/23/2023 3:32:00 PM

Thanks, Jerry. Not a form I would normally indulge, but I gave it a go and this was it… after a thousand (?) rewrites.

David Fisher

Date: 9/21/2023 5:17:00 PM

Pretty intense creature you've outlined. It sounds like a vegan zombie type of thing.

Terry Flood
Date: 9/21/2023 5:21:00 PM

How dare you call my brain a cauliflower! Ha ha! In my mind it’s a brain eating ‘thing’. Thanks for your thoughts, David.