Sara Kendrick Poet Pantoum

The Cargo

The hull of the boat was full
Lying so close to each other
They used a tool
To clamp the irons on brother

Lying so close to each other
The stink in the hull was death
To clamp the irons on brother
The boat moving pitching beneath

Lying so close to each other
They used a tool
The stink in the hull was death
The hull of the boat was full

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Doris Culverhouse August 10, 2009 at 5:08 PM INteresting

Jessica Arteaga August 10, 2009 at 4:52 PM another great pantoum sara! each sentence has no confusion for they glide well together

Matthew Anish August 10, 2009 at 4:45 PM Is this supposed to be about a slave ship? Weel handled pantoum! I originally named "Reign of Peace" "The Somnombulist" but decided it was really not fitting. Also, - it is hard to spell! Yours in poetry Matthew Anish

James Fraser August 10, 2009 at 11:25 AM Clever, clever write Sara>>James

Cesar Cantu August 10, 2009 at 10:13 AM =D I've never read something with this structure; reminds me somehow of System of a Down lyrics xD jojojojo nice image, it felt like waves, the come-back lover @.@ thanks for the experience =D and for the comment =D indeed, for a moment not even I was sure about my intention jojojo then I got it @.@

Ts Lewis August 10, 2009 at 8:12 AM Very thought provoking. The bondage still resonates. TL