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The hull of the boat was full Lying so close to each other They used a tool To clamp the irons on brother Lying so close to each other The stink in the hull was death To clamp the irons on brother The boat moving pitching beneath Lying so close to each other They used a tool The stink in the hull was death The hull of the boat was full

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 8/10/2009 5:08:00 PM
INteresting
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Date: 8/10/2009 4:52:00 PM
another great pantoum sara! each sentence has no confusion for they glide well together
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Date: 8/10/2009 4:45:00 PM
Is this supposed to be about a slave ship? Weel handled pantoum! I originally named "Reign of Peace" "The Somnombulist" but decided it was really not fitting. Also, - it is hard to spell! Yours in poetry Matthew Anish
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Date: 8/10/2009 11:25:00 AM
Clever, clever write Sara>>James
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Date: 8/10/2009 10:13:00 AM
=D I've never read something with this structure; reminds me somehow of System of a Down lyrics xD jojojojo nice image, it felt like waves, the come-back lover @.@ thanks for the experience =D and for the comment =D indeed, for a moment not even I was sure about my intention jojojo then I got it @.@
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Date: 8/10/2009 8:12:00 AM
Very thought provoking. The bondage still resonates. TL
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