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The shell remains picked clean by hungry vultures ravenous with greed. Gouged-out eyes now bare hollow sockets vacant in their stare. Morsels of choice parts deftly stripped or torn away— and gutted vitals, furtively devoured, have filled the wanton needs of scavengers who shared the feast. The carcass rests flat on bony frame supported once by plump, round legs on which it mightily ran. There it lies— a brittle, empty shell— the poor abandoned Chevy on the Harlem River Drive. Sandra M. Haight ~1st Place~ Premiere Contest: Bring To Life Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton Judged: 04/14/2018 ~3rd Place~ Contest: East Jesus Sponsor: Roy Jerden Judged: 01/02/2015 Note: Inspired by my many trips years ago in the late 70s, to visit my father in a hospital there. I would see so many abandoned cars lined up as 'empty shell carcasses' along the Harlem River Drive in New York City.

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/16/2018 12:25:00 AM

Wonderful write with such a creative and intelligent line ... loved this, Sandra! Congrats on your win!! :-) <3

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:17:00 PM

Thank you, Gregory. Those automobile carcasses really stirred my imagination! I appreciate your visit, congrats, and supportive comments very much. Sandra :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/15/2018 7:46:00 PM

Wow! You REALLY surprised me with that ending. No Wonder you placed FIRST, Sandra. Janice

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:13:00 PM

Thanks, Janice. Glad you enjoyed the ending, and I appreciate your supportive comments! Hugs, Sandra

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/15/2018 12:22:00 PM

Congrats on your gold medal finish. Bravo. Beautiful twist at the end, Sandra. I thought you had been inspired by an episode of National Geographic. LOL

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:12:00 PM

Thank you so much, Line! Those auto carcasses really got my muse going! Hugs, Sandra

Susan Gentry

Date: 4/15/2018 12:06:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this gruesome but clever story. Did not see that coming! Excellent!

Elaine George

Date: 4/15/2018 9:37:00 AM

Wow! Very potent imagery, Sandra. Many congrats on your well-deserved first place win. Elaine

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:11:00 PM

Thank you, Elaine. Glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your supportive comments and congrats! Hugs, Sandra

Winged Warrior

Date: 4/15/2018 4:19:00 AM

Congrats!!! on first place Sandra...great writing my friend...take care and stay in the light...^WW^

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:11:00 PM

Thank you very much, ^WW^. Much appreciated. Sandra

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 4/14/2018 9:33:00 PM

Congratulations, Sandra on your first position win. Great flowing poem.

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:08:00 PM

Thank you so much, Subimal! Hugs, Sandra

Eve Roper

Date: 4/14/2018 9:07:00 PM

Congratulations Sandra, well deserved win! Hugs Eve

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:07:00 PM

Thank you very much, Eve! Hugs, Sandra

Caycay Jennings

Date: 4/14/2018 7:48:00 PM

How clever and so very well written, loved the unexpected ending! Congratulations on this superb writing taking top slot, you deserve that and more. All the best ... CayCay

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:07:00 PM

Thank you, CayCay, for your very supportive comments and congrats! Hugs, Sandra

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/14/2018 5:43:00 PM

Congratulations Sandra, well deserved win. Tom

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:06:00 PM

Thank you very much, Tom! Much appreciated. Sandra

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 4/14/2018 4:58:00 PM

Superb poem Sandra deliciously gruesome and captured the theme perfectly. congrts on 1st place hugs

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/15/2018 8:46:00 PM

Thank you for a great contest, Shadow. I am very honored with my placement! Hugs, Sandra

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/3/2015 8:53:00 PM

Really wonderful Sandra! Congrats on ur great win!

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/4/2015 10:38:00 AM

Thank you so much, Dr. Upma! I appreciate your visit and nice coment and congrats. Sandra

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/3/2015 7:53:00 PM

I really enjoyed this! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/4/2015 10:39:00 AM

Thank you so much, Debbie. Thank you for stopping by with your positive comment and congratulations. I really appreciate it. Hugs, Sandra

John Lawless

Date: 1/3/2015 10:56:00 AM

Hey, Sandra, was there a '63 VW Bug, beige, out there. God I think of that car and its many and varied lives. Great take on the contest, well done.

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/4/2015 10:40:00 AM

Hi John...could have been! In those days, I saw so many. Thanks for your visit with your nice comment. Sandra

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/3/2015 5:54:00 AM

Congrats on the fine win and nice take on the theme,

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/4/2015 10:41:00 AM

Thank you so much, Dr. Ram. I appreciate your support. Sandra

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/2/2015 11:51:00 PM

Sandra, Interesting topic, poem and win. CONGRATULATIONS!!! Goodnight ~LINDA~

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/4/2015 10:42:00 AM

Hi Linda, it is always so nice to read your comments. Thank you so much for stopping by with your congratulations. Hugs, Sandra

Earl Schumacker

Date: 1/2/2015 3:56:00 PM

Hi Sandra, Excellent write. Excellent win. Good for you. Keep up the good work. Take care. Earl

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/4/2015 10:43:00 AM

Thank you so much, Earl. It's always nice to read your positive comments! Sandra

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/2/2015 12:17:00 PM

Congrats on win Sandra.Love> rajat

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/2/2015 3:41:00 PM

Thank you so much, Rajat. I appreciate your congratulations and support. Best wishes in the new year. Sandra

Paul Callus

Date: 1/2/2015 10:53:00 AM

Absolutely brilliant....clever ending, too. #7 Congratulations on this lovely win, Sandra! // paul

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/2/2015 3:42:00 PM

Thank you, Paul. You are so supportive, and I really appreciate that. Sandra

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/2/2015 10:51:00 AM

A good analogy that delivered,congrats on the win Sandra...huggs

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/2/2015 3:43:00 PM

Thank you, Kayod5. I appreciate your nice comments. Sandra

Jan Allison

Date: 1/2/2015 10:20:00 AM

Such vivid description - love the twist at the end of the poem Sandra - many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/2/2015 3:44:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jan. Hugs, Sandra

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/2/2015 10:15:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Sandra.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/2/2015 10:10:00 AM

Excellent Sandra, a fav for me!

Sandra Haight
Date: 1/2/2015 3:45:00 PM

Thank yo so much, Maurice, for your positive comment and support. Best to you in the new year. Sandra

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 12/12/2014 10:37:00 PM

Wow Sandra. This is brilliant writing. I hope you do really well. I would instantly give you a one in the contest. That equals a seven and a fav. here.

Sandra Haight
Date: 12/14/2014 12:25:00 PM

Thanks so much, Brenda. I really appreciate your kind words and support. Hugs, Sandra

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/12/2014 4:38:00 PM

great description and until the end, people will not know it is about cars unless they read it here and see that picture you showed. so it's a poem with a great twist!

Sandra Haight
Date: 12/12/2014 8:15:00 PM

Hi Andrea, thanks for stopping by with your positive comment. Do you think I should remove the picture and paragraph in notes? Sandra