The Bottle Upon the Shore

The bottle was found upon the shore,
looking forlorn and green with a cork,
it wasn't impressive except that a 
note was folded inside ready to be
read by the beachcomber with delight.

Seagulls encircled the event as if they 
knew what the discovery was all about,
eyeing the lone man unplugging the 
bottle made them more curious as he 
went about with much dramatic bravo. 

Placing the bottle upside down and tapping 
the bottom made the yellowed note fall out, 
carefully unfolding it with large veiny hands, 
he read each word written in delicate and 
flowery cursive as if done by a woman. 

'Jonathan Dearest as I am writing this letter, 
my ship is out to sea taking on water and 
soon will be sinking with many on board, 
including me because there are not enough 
lifeboats on the Titanic...'

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 4/24/2020 10:22:00 PM
You had me from the first line to the punchline at the end of the story. So well done with just the right amount of detail. Congratulations on your first place win!
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Sonia Walker
Date: 4/24/2020 10:40:00 PM
Sam, glad my poem captured your attention. Thank you for the congratulations. ~ Sonia
Date: 4/24/2020 10:09:00 AM
Sonia, Excellent write! Nice twist at the end. David
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Sonia Walker
Date: 4/24/2020 11:21:00 AM
David, thank you for your kind words. ~ Sonia
Date: 12/13/2017 9:02:00 PM
that last stanza, great poem Sonia, congratulations on ur placement :)
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Sonia Walker
Date: 12/14/2017 8:07:00 AM
Lewis, thank you. ~ Sonia
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