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The Bony Finger
Investigator Carla received a bony finger Tossed through her window by a mystery slinger With it came a note that vexed her curious mind “This finger’s all I took, the rest I left behind” The note dared her to visit Windom Plantation A haunted mansion of maligned reputation Driving miles uphill to a “castle in the sky” The old estate’s legacy began to petrify Wind howled through broken windows as she opened the door To find long-legged spiders crawling on the floor Carla used her flashlight to explore each dark room Shrieking cries emanated from one windowless tomb Her cell phone in hand, Carla mustered the courage With pulse pounding, she hoped rumors she’d disparage Then she saw it, a shadow moving toward the attic And all at once, Carla’s persona grew frantic She followed it, climbing the attic stairs in haste To find horror greater than that for which she’d braced A destitute man who was missing every finger Had sent notes like Carla’s to nine other sinners It took but one soul with compassion and fortitude To free this man from lonely, haunting solitude
*Posted on January 12, 2019 Submitted for Jenish Somada's "Let the Pens Flow" narrative contest

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Date: 1/25/2019 8:28:00 AM
Wow Carolyn, what a deserving win! A terrifying poem so amazingly written - nail biting until the last word. A really scary poem. Congratulations Carolyn Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/25/2019 10:35:00 AM
My mind can go to dark places when I eat the wrong food. LOL
Date: 1/24/2019 9:36:00 AM
O my! That ending I did not see coming! Great story-telling Carolyn! Congratulations :)
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Date: 1/24/2019 7:35:00 AM
Amazing where the imagination can take you!! I think that bony finger beckoned a sure success from the sponsor!
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Date: 1/24/2019 2:43:00 AM
Gosh this made the hairs on the back of my neck rise!! Brilliant imagery and loved your rhyming, particularly "a bony finger and mystery slinger", haha. Many congrats Carolyn on your winning placement. Kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Date: 1/23/2019 9:51:00 PM
This is just wonderful! A spooky tale with a compassionate ending! Just wonderful! LIke finding a kitten, and feeding the kitten, in a Stephen King Novel.
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Date: 1/23/2019 7:27:00 PM
Nicely done, Carolyn, you have created great imagery and feeling on your well written poem. . Congratulations on your win . Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 1/23/2019 7:20:00 PM
A chilling tale.... Congrats on your win Carolyn..
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Date: 1/23/2019 5:50:00 PM
Carolyn I really liked your suspenseful story, congratulations on your winning placement!
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/23/2019 7:10:00 PM
Thanks, Tania! I'm really impressed with Ed Morris's amazing poem. It was captivating. I had fun writing mine. Thanks for second place.
Date: 1/15/2019 5:16:00 PM
YOu did well with the challenge. I did not realize I had to describe an entire night in a manor but once I told my story, I was already up to 24 line limit so it is what it is. haha. I hope you are ok and that I get a note from you soon!
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Date: 1/14/2019 8:24:00 PM
Hello Carolyn, this poem is creepy!!! I had chills when reading it. have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 1/13/2019 2:10:00 PM
Ooh, I got a chill...wonderful entry for the contest; well done.
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Date: 1/13/2019 10:32:00 AM
Hi Carolyn, fantastic write. Before I go on, I can say, reads like a winner to me. From the first line I was hooked. This is a story that holds the reader's attention, it has everything. I love the suspenseful drama. I just love the whole content. Your words paint such strong images. I got the heebies at the spiders. I definitely have a spider phobia. This one has to do well. Good luck in the contest. Have a wonderful Sunday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/13/2019 10:42:00 AM
Afraid of a little creepy wood spider? LOL The first time I saw one, I screamed. They were on the walls in a friend's kitchen at night. They're at least 4 inches long/wide and have dark fur all over them. Surprisingly, they're not harmful, just rather hideous to see.
Date: 1/12/2019 7:46:00 PM
Awesome! Gripping, dramatic, fantastic.. Loved every second of it.. Super
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/13/2019 2:29:00 AM
Thanks, Aseem!. Desai may be a common last name in some parts of the world and there was an Anoop Desai competing on "American Idol." What a wonderful voice he had! He was in the top four.
Date: 1/12/2019 4:23:00 PM
Wow, I loved this, what a great tale and this is just so well written!
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/13/2019 2:27:00 AM
Thanks, Arthur. I didn't even know where it would go when I first started writing.
Date: 1/12/2019 4:03:00 PM
You have a creative and imaginative mind, Carolyn! Gosh...I'm now looking at my hands, just in case one finger has gone missing! You need no good luck here...a winner in my eyes! Hugs // paul
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/13/2019 2:26:00 AM
Had some fun with this, Paul. I'd like to write a screenplay on it. Thanks for reading!