The Boat of Us

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The Boat Of Us 'Twas a few years back, I remembered that, When we had both placed our down payment checks, At first we did not know which one, in fact, We chose, then placed our personal effects, They gave us our berth's, 'twas but side by side, When we went fishing, our haul equaled both, We filled our nets till we were satisfied, Held separate jobs, together lost hope, Long have we parted, until that storm hit, My boat had adrift, could not make it start, You came and towed us but the line had split, I gave up my boat, got on yours was smart, Home safe, next day, on the beach our boat sat, 'Twas a few years back, I remembered that. 2019 May 14 *1st Place* Choices ~~Sara Kendrick #1

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Lonna Blodgett

Date: 6/20/2019 9:19:00 PM

Love how you intertwined The journey together in the same boat with the value of friendship not forgotten. Nice!!!

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/20/2019 9:39:00 PM

Mines was an early entrant, ergo, very raw, straight-off-the-hip, not much forethought with the nuances and particulars of being articulate in its delivery--but 'tis the message contained. 'Twas the case for all of my three 1st place niches, this, 'THE BOAT OF US' by Sara Kendrick, 'A PATCH OF BLUE' by charles messina, and, 'HEAVE US HOME' by Eve Roper ~ William

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/12/2019 4:03:00 PM

a splendid story of friendship so well penned, william... huggs

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/12/2019 4:43:00 PM

Most kind of you nette, thanks! Aloha wk