The Black Mountain

High up on the rockiest mountain A mountain of black stone Very sharp the flat face This place has a dark cloud Floating just over the mountain It’s the only cloud in the sky Ominous darkness over the black stone A mountain of doom it is It will rain on the harsh land Treacherous the landscape is Great and mighty Especially with the large cloud All power is spread about here Not many can climb this mountain The mighty sheer mountain Of all slate, coal black stone The cloud seems to be attached To the dim mountain A whole scene of darkness Very hard to see and visualize To see the top of the mountain Maybe no one has really seen the very top They might not be able to reach it To feel the mightiness of the mountain What power is there What a true feel of dominance A real deliverance of the soul Into another realm of life The black mountain
Russell Sivey

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 4/30/2013 8:31:00 AM
Very gripping Russell! I like how you mention how it's very likely no one has even seen the top... it's adds to the ominousness of the black mountain. I sometimes feel tempted to climb it just to say I've been there... lol. Great work!
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Date: 4/26/2013 12:19:00 PM
I found this very interesting and symbolic of more than one thing... Facinating, powerful write unto it's self.
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Date: 4/22/2013 2:50:00 PM
this is a bit eerie, which is GOOD, Russell. Such a formidable mountain you write of!
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Date: 4/22/2013 12:50:00 PM
i think this is one of your best, russell... languid imagery that expresses beautifully intangible ideas and feelings... one in particular I love:' Of all slate, coal black stone The cloud seems to be attached To the dim mountain A whole scene of darkness'... very detailed and rendered like a painting... soulful; great stuff!..:) huggs!
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Date: 4/22/2013 9:17:00 AM
Good morning Russell, i love the way you darken this poem, and still I read nothing but beauty. I wish to see this mountain, or maybe my soul is there already... I also wanted to stop by and thank you for the nice and fun way you commented my poem... always~ Linda
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Date: 4/22/2013 7:42:00 AM
I hope that this is not about dark feelings this morn..Just about a mountatin..Soupmail soon..Sara
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Date: 4/22/2013 7:15:00 AM
Your dark mountain has some interesting metaphorical comparatives-- well written xx
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Date: 4/22/2013 6:46:00 AM
Very good imagery Russel. I enjoyed reading your poem, well done.
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