Russell Sivey Poet Free verse

The Black Mountain

High up on the rockiest mountain
A mountain of black stone
Very sharp the flat face
This place has a dark cloud
Floating just over the mountain
It’s the only cloud in the sky
Ominous darkness over the black stone
A mountain of doom it is
It will rain on the harsh land
Treacherous the landscape is
Great and mighty 
Especially with the large cloud
All power is spread about here
Not many can climb this mountain
The mighty sheer mountain
Of all slate, coal black stone
The cloud seems to be attached
To the dim mountain
A whole scene of darkness
Very hard to see and visualize
To see the top of the mountain
Maybe no one has really seen the very top
They might not be able to reach it
To feel the mightiness of the mountain
What power is there
What a true feel of dominance
A real deliverance of the soul
Into another realm of life
The black mountain

Russell Sivey

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Timothy Hicks April 30, 2013 at 8:31 AM Very gripping Russell! I like how you mention how it's very likely no one has even seen the top... it's adds to the ominousness of the black mountain. I sometimes feel tempted to climb it just to say I've been there... lol. Great work!

Carol Eastman April 26, 2013 at 12:19 PM I found this very interesting and symbolic of more than one thing... Facinating, powerful write unto it's self.

Andrea Dietrich April 22, 2013 at 2:50 PM this is a bit eerie, which is GOOD, Russell. Such a formidable mountain you write of!

Nette Onclaud April 22, 2013 at 12:50 PM i think this is one of your best, russell... languid imagery that expresses beautifully intangible ideas and feelings... one in particular I love:' Of all slate, coal black stone The cloud seems to be attached To the dim mountain A whole scene of darkness'... very detailed and rendered like a painting... soulful; great stuff!..:) huggs!

Poet Destroyer A April 22, 2013 at 9:17 AM Good morning Russell, i love the way you darken this poem, and still I read nothing but beauty. I wish to see this mountain, or maybe my soul is there already... I also wanted to stop by and thank you for the nice and fun way you commented my poem... always~ Linda

Sara Kendrick April 22, 2013 at 7:42 AM I hope that this is not about dark feelings this morn..Just about a mountatin..Soupmail soon..Sara

Kim Van Breda April 22, 2013 at 7:15 AM Your dark mountain has some interesting metaphorical comparatives-- well written xx

Richard Lamoureux April 22, 2013 at 6:46 AM Very good imagery Russel. I enjoyed reading your poem, well done.