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Intruding the evening and throbbing like pain there's a gathering contusion of purple and blue that fills the horizon, and rattles the plains With a change in the air, and foreboding, it weighs turning the sky into gun-metal gray There are birds I can see, that have bent every limb, hovering high in the cottonwoods, while cocking their heads.. A hawk circles low over fields growing grain, scanning for shelter, sensing the rain Bold, unafraid, something shatters the bones of an earth that is weary, .. thirsty, and worn It scatters the birds as we look up the road where the sun has retreated and troops have composed There is pathos, confusion, in wind driven clouds swept in from the rim of darkness, and now the tongue of a serpent has severed the sky bleaching the landscape, and blinding the eye. Earth trembles in pain, dueling swords will collide Count to ten, as they say, sparks will fly once again The war isn't over……… Take cover and run! ______________________________________________________ 2/23/18 Contest: "Describe a thunder storm without the sense of sound" Sponsor: Brenda Chiri

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Date: 3/5/2018 4:26:00 AM
Back to Congratulate you on your win Carrie. I knew it would be on the winner's list! : )
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Date: 3/3/2018 10:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win.. wonderful imagery made me feel every line...
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Date: 3/3/2018 7:16:00 PM
Such powerful imagery of the mighty thunderstorm, Carrie, without using the sense of sound. Congratulations on your placement on this short list of winners. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/3/2018 6:25:00 PM
Enjoyable read, Carrie. Well done. Congrats.
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Date: 3/3/2018 5:25:00 PM
wow, I can really see how this one got on the list. Splendid job you did of it, Carrie. I wish mine had been that good!! Congrats for your win.
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Date: 2/28/2018 2:51:00 PM
Carrie, your poem is excellent! I'm sure it is exactly what Brenda is looking for. I hope to see this poem at the top! : )
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Date: 2/26/2018 7:59:00 AM
great poem sweet Carrie! You write with such ease and grace, good luck! :)-luloo
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Carrie Richards
Date: 2/26/2018 8:38:00 AM
Thank you Laura. It is good to be back again, thanks to nice people like you !
Date: 2/25/2018 12:09:00 PM
I have an unposted poem on lightening but your creative dramatic version is awesome to read, ESP admiring the forked serpent tongue and lightning fork comparison. Kudos and may the storm be over, stay safe pal. Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too pls.
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Carrie Richards
Date: 2/26/2018 8:39:00 AM
It was nice to check out your wonderful poem, and do appreciate your interest in mine. Thanks for checking my work!:)
Date: 2/23/2018 9:28:00 PM
A lovely read, Carrie. Love your poem.
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Carrie Richards
Date: 2/24/2018 10:36:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by my poem, Line!
Date: 2/23/2018 7:45:00 PM
Wow, Carrie...I can speak about thunderstorms living in Florida they can get downright nasty and your poetry captured it very very well...impressive write dear poet...good luck in the contest
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Date: 2/23/2018 3:59:00 PM
Well written. I like the line: As the sky is eclipsed by a gun metal gray. Good luck in the contest :)
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Date: 2/23/2018 2:08:00 PM
Vivid imagery creating a scary scenario... I found the 5th stanza very interesting... Great choice for the contest..
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Date: 2/23/2018 1:06:00 PM
Nature can be unruly at times. Good way of describing the weather.
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