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The Angry Sky


Intruding the evening and throbbing like pain
there's a gathering contusion of purple and blue 
that fills the horizon, and rattles the plains 

With a change in the air, and foreboding, it weighs
turning the sky into gun-metal gray
There are birds I can see, that have bent every limb,
hovering high in the cottonwoods, while cocking their heads..
A hawk circles low over fields growing grain,
scanning for shelter, sensing the rain

Bold, unafraid, something shatters the bones
of an earth that is weary, .. thirsty, and worn
It scatters the birds as we look up the road
where the sun has retreated and troops have composed

There is pathos, confusion, in wind driven clouds
swept in from the rim of darkness, and now
the tongue of a serpent has severed the sky
bleaching the landscape, and blinding the eye.

Earth trembles in pain, dueling swords will collide
Count to ten, as they say,  sparks will fly once again

The war isn't over……… Take cover and run!

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2/23/18
Contest: "Describe a thunder storm without the sense of sound"
Sponsor: Brenda Chiri
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Marcum Wong Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 4:26 AM
Back to Congratulate you on your win Carrie. I knew it would be on the winner's list! : )
Roper Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 10:15 PM
Congratulations on your win.. wonderful imagery made me feel every line...
Haight Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 7:16 PM
Such powerful imagery of the mighty thunderstorm, Carrie, without using the sense of sound. Congratulations on your placement on this short list of winners. Hugs, Sandra
Gauthier Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 6:25 PM
Enjoyable read, Carrie. Well done. Congrats.
Dietrich Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 5:25 PM
wow, I can really see how this one got on the list. Splendid job you did of it, Carrie. I wish mine had been that good!! Congrats for your win.
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 2:51 PM
Carrie, your poem is excellent! I'm sure it is exactly what Brenda is looking for. I hope to see this poem at the top! : )
Scars Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 7:59 AM
great poem sweet Carrie! You write with such ease and grace, good luck! :)-luloo
Richards Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 8:38 AM
Thank you Laura. It is good to be back again, thanks to nice people like you !
Kamoonpuri Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 12:09 PM
I have an unposted poem on lightening but your creative dramatic version is awesome to read, ESP admiring the forked serpent tongue and lightning fork comparison. Kudos and may the storm be over, stay safe pal. Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too pls.
Richards Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 8:39 AM
It was nice to check out your wonderful poem, and do appreciate your interest in mine. Thanks for checking my work!:)
Gauthier Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 9:28 PM
A lovely read, Carrie. Love your poem.
Richards Avatar
February 24, 2018 at 10:36 AM
Thank you for stopping by my poem, Line!
Parker Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 7:45 PM
Wow, Carrie...I can speak about thunderstorms living in Florida they can get downright nasty and your poetry captured it very very well...impressive write dear poet...good luck in the contest
Sands Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 3:59 PM
Well written. I like the line: As the sky is eclipsed by a gun metal gray. Good luck in the contest :)
One Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 2:08 PM
Vivid imagery creating a scary scenario... I found the 5th stanza very interesting... Great choice for the contest..
Blanca Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 1:06 PM
Nature can be unruly at times. Good way of describing the weather.
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