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The Afternoon Moon

The Afternoon Moon Grandmother reclines in the passenger seat, while sunlight glows through her white wavy hair. Her cheeks rosy, she smiles at me as I drive east toward the Blossom Trail. I beam back, then remember my mask hides my mouth. We pass some almond orchards, the flowers like drops of warm vanilla cream under the clear blue sky. Grandmother remarks how some trees already dropped their petals, though it’s not even March. A white half moon climbs the sky, like it wants to get a jump start on night, even if it’s only two o’clock. It tries to rush away my Sunday, my present moment, my time with Grandmother into a whole week without her. Will it hasten the day she’ll move into assisted living, where I won’t be allowed to see her? Published in Song of the San Joaquin, Spring 2021 Issue

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Date: 10/10/2023 10:12:00 AM
Beautiful and heartfelt. You have a wonderful style for telling a story.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 10/29/2023 2:11:00 PM
Thank you Kevin! I really appreciate your kind comment.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 10/29/2023 2:10:00 PM
Date: 8/21/2021 1:47:00 PM
Jennifer, Beautiful and heartfelt. So descriptive I could see the trees and the sky as I rode along with you and your grandmother. A visceral feeling of loss at the end. Lovely. All the best to you, Susan :)
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 8/22/2021 3:57:00 PM
Oh, thank you Susan, for the lovely comment! So great to hear from you!
Date: 7/28/2021 2:26:00 PM
Very nice Jennifer. I enjoyed this and could see the sights like I was there :)
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 7/29/2021 1:37:00 PM
Thank you Heidi! Thank you for letting me know I achieved my goal for my readers: to make them feel like they are in the places I depict.
Date: 7/10/2021 9:44:00 AM
You have a keen eye for detail, Jennifer, thus the captivating imagery. I enjoyed reading, even though the ending is somewhat sad. ~ Regards // paul
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 7/10/2021 5:23:00 PM
Hi Paul! Thank you for visiting me. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Grandma is moving to an assisted living facility on Monday, but praise Jesus the pandemic status is that I can visit her if I wear my mask in the hallways and can take her on outings.
Date: 7/6/2021 1:43:00 PM
A great tale well told Jennifer, with such good imagery and insightful expression too. Hope all is good with you, Gordon
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 7/8/2021 1:39:00 PM
Thank you Gordon for your visit and encouraging words! All is well. Hope all is great for you too.
Date: 6/30/2021 11:03:00 AM
A wonderful story/write. Congratulations you had it published. Have a blessed day.................
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 6/30/2021 1:37:00 PM
Thank you Paula! It’s always so great to hear from you. Have a nice 4th!
Date: 6/12/2021 8:51:00 PM
Ah, yes, I love this poem, and written during the pandemic, too. So the last line of the first stanza, you remember that your mask hides your smile. I really like this poem, Jennifer. Carol Louise
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 6/13/2021 2:23:00 PM
I’m delighted that you like it! Thank you for reading it!
Date: 6/12/2021 1:13:00 PM
Another very expressive poem with deep poignancy. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, Jennifer.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 6/12/2021 1:16:00 PM
Thank you much! I am glad you enjoyed it.

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