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Robert J. Lindley, 6-28-2020
Rhyme Dark, A bold look inward..
( On the inner ponderings of the human soul
 and life's many paths taken )
 
Note One: 
I would like to thank my friend, Lawrence Sharp
and his poem titled, "Of Myth And More Or Less"
for its seeding my brief ryhming comment made
to and  about that fine poem. To which the idea
and continued inspiration later gave birth to
this new creation and my great pleasure in setting
the composing task to meet a hard criteria while
staying as much possible within the concept that 
his poem revealed to me...
 
Note Two:
This poem was composed with these set restrictions
Three stanzas, each stanza eight verses, each 
stanza exactly 60 words, each a total of 80 syllables.
Each stanza to be able to be a stand alone dark poem,
were that a choice made. In this case it was not.
This goal, this puzzle was met and a true joy it was
to complete the task.
 
Each stanza
Syllables Per Line:
10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10
Total # Syllables:80
Total # Words:60
 
Total
Syllables Per Line:
10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 0 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10
Total # Syllables:240
Total # Words:180
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ That Which Held Me In A Magical Spell That which held me in a magical spell Dark, its winding infinity and heart Its red beach, covered in sad broken shells Shreds of humanity once torn apart. Within hard gaping gasps and stormy sea Beauty once trampled in mad haste and greed Else sadden look at folly within me Why on our own swords we oft fall and bleed! Deep thoughts and those silent murmurs in life Echoes of cavernous pains, woe'some woes Memories dredged up by dire worldly strife So well hidden that no fear ever shows. Mortal wondering, malevolent things Deep sorrows and aches they come and they go Weak flesh blundering(s), as a dark star sings Each a dead corpse as lost and blind we row! That which set me in a revolving maze Phantasms of meanderings through deep hell Gasping fears brought on by insipid craze To search those nightmares we should never tell. LO! Dare we unsavory black explore Dawn armor to such inner sanctums raid Seek long sought answers while we ask no more Than devil's touch and the cut of his blades? Robert J. Lindley, 6-28-2020 Rhyme Dark, A bold look inward.. ( On the inner ponderings of the human soul and life's many paths taken )

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Date: 7/2/2020 10:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. WOW!!! I love your line, "Why on our own swords we oft fall and bleed!" So true but why do we????? Enjoy your win and day............
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Robert Lindley
Date: 7/2/2020 11:01:00 AM
Thank you my friend. Sad but true, we too oft fall on our own swords because we yield to temptation and greed without regard to possible tragic consequences that may come. Weakness of the flesh and darken paths followed always yield dark fruits and sad endings, imho. God bless...
Date: 7/1/2020 1:37:00 PM
Deep introspection that is touching all our lives Robert. A wonderful choice for the honor of POTD! Congratulations my friend. Blessings xxoo
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Robert Lindley
Date: 7/1/2020 6:59:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Looking back at life can serve as a guide to make wiser choices as to future paths to take. That is, if one is able to learn from mistakes made.. God bless..
Date: 7/1/2020 8:12:00 AM
A cutting ending to this dark write...Congratulations Robert on POTD...Well done
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Date: 7/1/2020 12:58:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Life teaches many lessons- some we never forget. One is that darkness often parades as if it is light. And that manifests itself in people much to the detriment and disaster to its innocent victims. In youth this is not abundantly clear. As youth is the most dangerous time . One is blessed if they can come through it relatively unscathed. God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 6:46:00 PM
"Why on our own swords we oft fall and bleed!" There is soooo much truth in this statement. When you truly think about it, this thought is a hard one to swallow. Lawrence is a wonderful inspiration. Robert, your muse followed along perfectly with his thoughts. Your dark poetry shines, in such a powerful way. Congratulations my dear friend, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:25:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Seems to me that in my youth , I feel on my own sword too many times! I was very lucky to have survived a couple of those times! Lawrence and his very fine poem woke my muse and my youthful follies came to mind.. God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 2:59:00 PM
wonderful write my friend and a huge congratulations for a worthy POTD … hugs
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:22:00 PM
Thank you my friend. A wonderful congratulations on this inspired piece from you is most appreciated. God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 2:38:00 PM
This poem is full of beautiful phrasing, Robert, and the dark content entices the reader. Your level of writing soars to the tune of your muse, my friend. ~ congratulations on being a worthy recipient of p.o.t.d. award. Regards // paul
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Robert Lindley
Date: 6/29/2020 9:20:00 PM
Paul my friend. Your kind words and congratulations mean so much as has our friendship and past pleasure when composing together! God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 12:14:00 PM
A wonderful poem throughout, Robert, engagingly enriching for it truly entertained my day, my compliments indeed for POTD my friend -- Aloha~@William
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:18:00 PM
William, thank you my friend, I truly appreciate your compliments and very kind words. God bless....
Date: 6/29/2020 10:32:00 AM
Robert, an excellent example of a poet looking deeply inward. "Weak flesh blundering(s), as a dark star sings". Glad I saw this gem today, and congratulations on your well-deserved POTD. God bless ~ John
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:17:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Looking in deep has been a habit of mine for a long time. As a poet , I recognize the failings of the flesh and our inherent dark nature. God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 10:05:00 AM
I had to read it twice before making a comment. You are such an accomplished poet, who can top you?
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:15:00 PM
Thank you my friend. From inspiration received from reading Lawrence's fine poem these verses just flowed on out. God bless..
Date: 6/29/2020 9:18:00 AM
Great Job Robert! Congrats on POTD! Stay safe my friend.
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:14:00 PM
Mark, thank you my friend. I am staying safe at home writing poetry. God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 6:39:00 AM
Masterly crafted in your trademark fashion, exquisite work Robert; congratulations on POTD! Have a wonderful day dear poet. ~Maureen
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:13:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I am very pleased my trademark fashion and inspiration gave rise to these verses. God bless..
Date: 6/29/2020 6:01:00 AM
A well deserved honour of POTD Robert. Tom
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:11:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I was pleasantly surprised to find this awarded POTD. God bless..
Date: 6/29/2020 5:19:00 AM
wow you write deep dark poetry so expertly many congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:10:00 PM
Jan, thank you my friend. I am truly delighted this poem has been well received. God bless..
Date: 6/29/2020 4:49:00 AM
Back with congratulations on POTD, my friend, well deserved.
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Date: 6/29/2020 9:08:00 PM
Thank you my friend. After all your poem gave inspiration for the birth of this one. God bless...
Date: 6/29/2020 4:10:00 AM
A magnificent magical master...poetic creations abound~Sir Robert...let me be the first to give you a super Congrats!! on POTD!! my friend...plus I love your dark renderings...^WW^ :o)
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Robert Lindley
Date: 6/29/2020 9:07:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Super congrats appreciated.. God bless..
Date: 6/28/2020 12:18:00 PM
there are so many who are afraid of the dark....mere whimpers seem like the loudest harks....fear, the greatest tool for control....giving in to it will only pollute the Soul....but for some, they must have the thrill....until they learn its too late, thats how people in horror movies get killed....lol....much enjoyed mr lindley....not quite what i was expecting yet very entertaining....i am a horror fan....
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Robert Lindley
Date: 6/28/2020 12:33:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Your fine poetic comment perhaps deserves a continuation into a new poem that you may decide to in the future gift us. I like those verses immensely. One can only hope and wait. God bless....
Date: 6/28/2020 11:57:00 AM
Robert, your poem is magnificent and its structures flawless to a degree that I can't even try to emulate. Grand scale poetry, my inspirational friend ! Fave !
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Robert Lindley
Date: 6/28/2020 12:14:00 PM
I thank you doubly my friend. For the inspiration given me, when I had intended to only read. For the immensely great pleasure garnered by composing this new piece. And as always for our friendship and past collaborations we had the pleasure of composing. Thanks for the fav, means so much to me.. God bless..

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