Tattered Shapes

Looking into empty rooms, her eyes were filled,
Memories lived in tattered shapes and played here;
As she drifted back in ages past, tears spilled,
Laughter echoed and childhood voices stayed here.
She looked upon her care-worn hands time had billed,
Reflecting on those years, how now it fades here;
She would rewind the timepiece, if she but could,
She’d circle back and live again; twice as good.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Ruebel Avatar
January 25, 2011 at 10:31 AM
Hello Deb, Ahhhh, this is wonderful, I dare say we have all taken this trip back at some point in our lives..... Loved it Deb Congratulations on your win As Always, Shar
Brown Avatar
January 25, 2011 at 5:00 AM
Congratulations for the win Deb, in Dr. Ram Mehta's contest "Rispetto". Love, Carol
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2011 at 10:54 PM
What a profound line about her rewinding it "if she but could" I really like this one, deb. VERY nice, and Congratulations. Luv, Andrea
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January 24, 2011 at 5:02 PM
Congrats Deb on your wonderful win in the Rispetto contest with this elegant entry my friend.. superb as always.. enjoy with luv..
Kendrick Avatar
January 24, 2011 at 4:29 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
Haick Avatar
January 24, 2011 at 12:41 PM
Congratulations on your win in Dr. Ram's Contest, Deb! Love, Annalise
Devonshire Avatar
January 24, 2011 at 11:35 AM
Deb, Congratulations on your win in Dr. Ram's contest! Love, Carolyn
Freeman Avatar
January 24, 2011 at 11:23 AM
Congratulations Deb in the winner's circle, Agape, Moses
Mehta Avatar
January 24, 2011 at 11:02 AM
Congratulations on the well deserved win in my contest, deb
Pettit Avatar
January 8, 2011 at 3:24 PM
Good descriptiveness and good rhyming. Overall, an impressive piece.
Beck Avatar
January 8, 2011 at 12:04 PM
a nice piece containing many ideas which are present in every older person's mind ..I liked it a lot...best wishes ..Syd
Mehta Avatar
January 8, 2011 at 5:16 AM
Thanks for participating in the contest, deb
Dietrich Avatar
January 7, 2011 at 10:58 PM
I just love the topic you chose for your rispetto. It is unique and nostalgic. Luv, Andrea
Devonshire Avatar
January 7, 2011 at 9:21 PM
Wouldn't it be wonderful to be able to rewind that timpiece so we could live our lives twice as well as before, Deb? A moving portrait of this old woman and the happier times that haunted her in the emptry rooms. Love, Carolyn
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January 7, 2011 at 6:35 PM
wonderful Deb!highly emotional one!goodluck in the contest!
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