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Tanka

Promises broken;
Scattered in the winds of change- 
Dreams forever lost.
Sunlight peeps through the darkness-
The leaving did not break me.


3/30/2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 4/8/2015 10:24:00 AM
Love that ray of sunlight. Good stuff. Love, daver
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/8/2015 12:25:00 PM
There's always a new day. Thanks Daver.
Date: 4/6/2015 2:02:00 PM
Loved every line here Janet, especially the last one ;) tc Wilma - thank you for your pop in on my side as well..
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/8/2015 12:24:00 PM
Thanks so much Wilma. I was glad I did.
Date: 4/1/2015 10:49:00 PM
this is very nice, Janet. I love its message.
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/2/2015 8:13:00 AM
Thank you. This is senryu turned tanka and stronger for it I think could probably write forever in choka style, but this seems just enough.
Date: 4/1/2015 5:46:00 AM
A wonderful tale of survival in the jungle that is life and love.
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/1/2015 10:21:00 AM
Thank you Armand! Hope your having a great day. ~Janet
Date: 3/31/2015 12:04:00 PM
- A both sad and positive tanka, Janet - Really like it - I've never written a tanka ..... maybe I'll try :) - For the sun is beautiful and you are so great, the day is yours # 7 # :) - Happy Easter! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/1/2015 10:19:00 AM
You should really try. You already write haiku. Love the Easter Chick! ((HUGS)) ~janet
Date: 3/31/2015 9:38:00 AM
Beautiful, pensive tanka. Sunlight always represents hope despite dreams lost. A 7. Kim :)
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/1/2015 10:18:00 AM
Thanks Kim. I love writing Senryu and this is one that I revised for Tanka. hope you having a gret day ~jan
Date: 3/30/2015 3:14:00 PM
I really loved this tanka Janet especially the positivity in the final couplet good luck in the contest xx 7 xx
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Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 3/30/2015 4:32:00 PM
Thanks Jan!