Tanka

Promises broken;
Scattered in the winds of change- 
Dreams forever lost.
Sunlight peeps through the darkness-
The leaving did not break me.


3/30/2015

leavingrelationshipstrengthtanka

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Daver Austin

April 8, 2015 at 10:24 AM

Love that ray of sunlight. Good stuff. Love, daver

Jaycee Cervenka

April 8, 2015 at 12:25 PM

There's always a new day. Thanks Daver.

Wilma Neels

April 6, 2015 at 2:02 PM

Loved every line here Janet, especially the last one ;) tc Wilma - thank you for your pop in on my side as well..

Jaycee Cervenka

April 8, 2015 at 12:24 PM

Thanks so much Wilma. I was glad I did.

Andrea Dietrich

April 1, 2015 at 10:49 PM

this is very nice, Janet. I love its message.

Jaycee Cervenka

April 2, 2015 at 8:13 AM

Thank you. This is senryu turned tanka and stronger for it I think could probably write forever in choka style, but this seems just enough.

Maurice Yvonne

April 1, 2015 at 5:46 AM

A wonderful tale of survival in the jungle that is life and love.

Jaycee Cervenka

April 1, 2015 at 10:21 AM

Thank you Armand! Hope your having a great day. ~Janet

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 31, 2015 at 12:04 PM

- A both sad and positive tanka, Janet - Really like it - I've never written a tanka ..... maybe I'll try :) - For the sun is beautiful and you are so great, the day is yours # 7 # :) - Happy Easter! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jaycee Cervenka

April 1, 2015 at 10:19 AM

You should really try. You already write haiku. Love the Easter Chick! ((HUGS)) ~janet