Tanka 3

Tanka 3 children so carefree laugh while sand castles topple in the sea… shattered dreams may bring teardrops in maturity © Sandra M. Haight 2015 All Rights Reserved ~7th Place~ Contest: Tanka 3: Return To Ten Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich Judged: 03/27/2015 .

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/2/2015 3:07:00 PM

Expressive winner!! Congrats!!! Sara

Sandra Haight
Date: 4/7/2015 3:19:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sara. I so much appreciate your stopping by with your nice comment and congrats. Hugs, Sandra

Eve Roper

Date: 3/29/2015 10:48:00 AM

Sandra ,the joys children take when they are young then their life is more serious as adults. I miss those young laughing times they have all vanished to stay in our memories. Congratulations on your win a 7 Blessings eve

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/31/2015 5:11:00 PM

Yes, Eve...the innocence of youth...I really appreciate your stopping by with your comment and congratulations. Thank you so much. Hugs, Sandra

David Mohn

Date: 3/29/2015 9:57:00 AM

love the contrast between childhood and becoming an adult...nicely written Sandra

Mohan Chutani

Date: 3/28/2015 11:57:00 PM

Sandra, a poignant message you brought forward to us in your Tanka. Congrats, Mohan.

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/29/2015 10:02:00 AM

Thank you so much, Mohan. So nice of your to stop by with your encouraging comment and congrats. Sandra

Kp Nunez

Date: 3/28/2015 1:32:00 PM

Such apt jux. Congratulations, Sandra. :) Kim

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/28/2015 4:29:00 PM

Thank you so much, Kim. I appreciate your positive comment and congratulations. Sandra

Abdul Malik

Date: 3/28/2015 11:56:00 AM

Very nice. This is what happens when you build dream castles!

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/28/2015 4:32:00 PM

Yes, Abdul...you are correct! Thanks for you supportive comment. Sandra

Joseph May

Date: 3/28/2015 11:17:00 AM

Congrats on a fine win Sandra..

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/28/2015 4:33:00 PM

Thank you so much, Joseph. I really appreciate your nice comment and congrats. Sandra

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/28/2015 10:26:00 AM

There is so much to foretell, in watching children at play. This rather melancholy, yet insightful tanka, captures this feeling in a nutshell !! Excellent piece, Sandra!! Congratulations!

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/28/2015 4:33:00 PM

Thank you so much Carrie. I so much appreciate your positive and supportive comments. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

Date: 3/28/2015 5:51:00 AM

I loved this write Sandra great to read it again - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/28/2015 4:34:00 PM

Hi Jan, I am so pleased that you enjoyed this, and I appreciate your nice comment and congrats. Hugs, Sandra

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/28/2015 12:42:00 AM

yes, there is such a contrast between a childhood fantasy toppling over and the adult dreams being shattered. great message in tanka form. congrats in my contest.

Sandra Haight
Date: 3/28/2015 4:36:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. This was another of your fine contests and I enjoyed participating in it. I am pleased that you liked my poem and thank you for the nice placement. Hugs, Sandra