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Tale Of Righteous And Just Demise Of Old Jack

Tale Of Righteous And Just Demise Of Old Jack Old Jack had shot many before, once just for the sheer hell of it Never squeamish about the gore or splattered about fleshy bits Once making it an all night spree, drinking whiskey after each shot Only once did he do it for free, knowing generosity fills no empty pot. One hot June night, he did away with tough cat called dangerous Dan Such a bloody sight, no easy task but put sweet coin in his empty pan Next day trip at the lake, he sniper shot famous knife fighter Jake A cool twenty grand take, such sweet fun nobody could ever fake. Old Jack, wicked as all hell, sure such Fate he would never meet Called his shots "ringing the bell", having never faced a defeat Once for big money, shot three men in a shady lakefront bar Later for loss of his "honey", ran over ex-wife's lover with his car. One cool Spring day, stranger came sworn to make old Jack pay Dressed in a beggerdly way, as a weakened and feeble old stray With hidden might and its all, Fate had finally sent its dark call While Jack was having a ball, swift bullet made its bloody landfall. Young John proud as all hell, had so gaily rang Jack's old bell Had his story to soon tell, how he spate on dying Jack as he fell One shot between those beady eyes, hundred bucks the prize Nobody there shed a tear, for now there was young John to fear. 8-29-2018 Rhyme

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Date: 8/30/2018 4:34:00 PM
"Fate had its final call"! Evil vanquished by evil! A captivating tale! An exquisite flow of sequence of events rhyming and pouring music into the heart.. a work of a master of words and of an ardent lover of poetry! In my FAV. list. Thank you so much Robert for sharing your beauties. My deepest regards. Be blessed always.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/30/2018 4:47:00 PM
Thank you my dear friend. And thanks for the fav I really appreciate that.. Fate is a raging beast more than it is a giver of blessings. With it being chained to death, darkness is its principle core methinks.. Those that embrace evil , still suffer at the hands of Fate. In this tale --evil destroyed evil --to thus replace evil with evil-- as young John merely took up the mantle.
Date: 8/30/2018 1:01:00 PM
Ooh, I certainly would not cross either of those two. Well-done...a great read.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/30/2018 4:43:00 PM
Thank you my good friend. Some people are without any decency, honor or moral compass- as such they are very, very dangerous to ever cross.
Date: 8/30/2018 1:44:00 AM
Great story, Robert, well told:)
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/30/2018 9:14:00 AM
Thank you my dear friend. I am truly delighted and so very pleased that you liked this one.
Date: 8/30/2018 12:28:00 AM
Excellent story-telling. It makes me think of the gunslingers and moonshine bootleggers of the prohibition era, straddling the line between the old and (then) new wild west. Great piece.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/30/2018 9:12:00 AM
Thank you my good friend. You nailed it with your comment as that is the combination that gave the inspiration for this tale..
Date: 8/29/2018 10:46:00 PM
Wow! My dear friend, Robert, your exquisite story-telling; the rhythm, rhymes (and the internal rhymes..), building intrigue and great finale, makes your brilliant poem a most enthralling piece. I just love how the details unfold, perfect in its pacing and deliverance of captivating energy and imagery. A superb dynamic gem of a write with a dramatic title as well.. A great poem and a FAV! Loved it. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/30/2018 9:11:00 AM
Thank you my dear friend. I honored so, that you chose to fav this short poetic tale. I had hoped this piece would find favor with the reader. That it has done so with you, and the others commenting sends a signal that it has done so.
Date: 8/29/2018 7:39:00 PM
Excellent. Like an unreeling mystery. I'd have killed him myself just for the cat.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/30/2018 9:07:00 AM
Thank you my friend. My mom was a huge cat lover. She preferred the female cat over that of the Tom.
Date: 8/29/2018 4:30:00 PM
Creative work. I watch I.D. and other true murder stories on TV and there are some out there just like the characters you so accurately describe. Thanks for the visit to my page. I appreciate your honor of faving my poem. Sara
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Date: 8/30/2018 9:05:00 AM
Thank you my dear friend. So true, criminals think only of themselves with no concern/pity for their victims. Many are so dark.evil, that putting 'em down for good is the correct action to take- as it is so in the case of Old Jack. Human are inherently evil and some embrace that instead of fighting it.