Takeoff

cold windblown down feathers dot the forming ice

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/20/2023 8:35:00 AM

Congratulations on this winning work in the contest. Way to go. Thank you for sharing it with us. Sara K

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/20/2023 2:12:00 AM

- Congratulations on your beautiful Lanterne in Joseph May's contest, John :) - hugs

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/19/2023 8:04:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your "Takeoff" write. Guess winter will be here soon. Have a blessed day/week......................

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 11/18/2023 12:51:00 PM

good, impactful use of language in this brief form - congrats on your win in the contest

Joseph May

Date: 11/18/2023 3:09:00 AM

Congrats on your win John, Nicely done

Ink Empress

Date: 11/18/2023 2:33:00 AM

Beautiful lanterne. Congratulations on your well deserved win . Loved reading this

Lin Lane

Date: 11/15/2023 12:34:00 PM

Mouth to beak, John.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 11/15/2023 12:12:00 AM

Always interesting, intriguing, insightful... with so few words... wonderful writing,. God bless you, love, Gina

Di11y Da11y

Date: 11/14/2023 11:42:00 PM

Poor little thing. I was at an immersive exhibition at the Imperial War Museum where they recreated the scene of a bomb going off in a market and the poets view of the devastation. There was noise and chaos but he focussed in on the charred pages of books floating slowly to the ground and the bizarre beauty of it against the horrific backdrop. This poem puts me in mind of that, imagining the feathers falling and those people that believe a feather appearing is the sign of an angel close by...

Bill Baker

Date: 11/14/2023 8:35:00 PM

Nice Lanterne poem, John. Is this for a contest? Good luck if it is, my friend. Well written to form. Have a great week! Bill