Take Two and Call Me In the Morning

Poetic Terrorist- flagrant Errorist! While all I write feels meritless And all I do seems perilous! Chalk it up to being careless... My Heart, my Mind- about to burst! Born, was I, a Soul accursed... A million wounds I have nursed Still I feel always the worse Send helicopters full of doctors- Tell me, what is their diagnosis? Oh! the Tests conclude I'm awkward! (What a bleak and poor prognosis!) *Old experimental piece

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Robin Davis

Date: 10/15/2013 9:08:00 AM

My poet friend This may be experimental but it passes all the tests of a great write. And if being awkward is bleak, then I have the same diagnosis. LOL Hugs

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/16/2013 7:58:00 AM

lol Thanks for the laugh and review, Robin ;)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 10/10/2013 6:43:00 PM

If this experimental then I would have to stand for the serious ones...lol. Good job my dear Archaic. You seem to write like everyday, I envy that lol. My inspiration don't come as freely as yours do. I've penned two simple poems today, check them out when you get the chance. Your friend always......Mustapha.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 7:32:00 PM

My creativity got jump started after my near death overdose back in July. Thanks as always for the read and reply, Mustapha :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 10/10/2013 2:54:00 PM

Your experimental piece is quite brilliant.. :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 3:52:00 PM

<3 Thanks, hon :)

Joseph Matose

Date: 10/9/2013 1:21:00 PM

A bomb blast in the midst of my reticent mind! Your experimental pieces have become detrimental to a languid mind! They push one to the limit of imagination.... I love your style my man. Keep up the beat! Friend. JM

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 12:32:00 PM

Joseph, your kind, thoughtful and supportive words mean a great deal to me; I'm happy this piece made you feel that way. Many thanks, my friend! :)