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Take Me Back My Love

Take me back my love…I shall show you a love you’ll n e v e r forget, Please unpack my love…I shall hold you enough, you’ll n e v e r regret. Let’s ease our anger and turn it into a night of sweet memories, please be my anchor and burn with passion for three centuries. A second chance I beg of you, honor reprieve I hoped you vowed, I’m dependent with one glance from you, please don’t leave now. I’ll show more respect and treat you like you really deserve, I know what you expect and meet you freely in our universe. Can a pardon be given to someone who has loved you since sixteen? you’re so hard on me and I’m living in clouds above with a heart unseen. Can flowers and rhymes be enough for you to walk back in my life? the hours and all the time has been rough, why can’t you talk to your wife? I understand your pain and I guess I didn’t realize I hurt you so bad, my hands aren’t the same with less of you; your cries make me sad. Break this silence and give me once more opportunity to show to you, I’ll take your guidance and live with more equanimity and show your value. Take me back my love…I shall show you a love you’ll n e v e r forget, Please unpack my love…I shall hold you enough, you’ll n e v e r regret. Internal rhyme used Second Chance Contest Sponsor: Nayda Ivette Negron Date Written: September 2, 2016

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 10/10/2016 5:08:00 PM

Wow, no second chance needed here...this was really good! Your internal rhyme was spectacular! Congratulations...well deserved win! MC

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/9/2016 8:28:00 AM

Lovely write, Laura:) worth the top spot really, congratulations on a great win:) I like the way you use internal rhyme so beautifully:) It was you who inspired me to try them out:) Thank you:)

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 8:36:00 AM

thank you lovely Jo:) I've been into internal rhyme lately I find it so almost romantic with the flow. Romantic doesn't always have to be related to love if you know what I mean :) thanks Jo :)-luloo

Tom Arnone

Date: 9/8/2016 6:00:00 PM

If he really wanted to come back, you wouldn't have to beg. Congrats on your win, Laura! :-)

Lu Loo
Date: 9/8/2016 8:48:00 PM

very true! thank God its fictional, huh? lol Thanks Tom :)-luloo

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 9/7/2016 9:53:00 PM

So touching...take me back my love...it goes to the heart..Congrats on your 1st place! Sunita

Lu Loo
Date: 9/8/2016 7:02:00 AM

thank you sweet Sunita :)-luloo

Rick Parise

Date: 9/7/2016 7:48:00 PM

Nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/8/2016 7:02:00 AM

thank you sweet Rick :)-luloo

Justin Bordner

Date: 9/7/2016 6:33:00 PM

"You're so hard on me, and I'm living in clouds above with a heart unseen..." This line of bleeding love speaks of a heart's honest need to be held Poetess. "I know what you expect and will meet freely in our Universe..." that's romantic partnership. "Please unpack my love..." , such a beautiful voice this love treasure speaks with Laura...J.A.B.

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2016 7:30:00 PM

many thanks sweet Justin :)-luloo

Jan Allison

Date: 9/7/2016 3:52:00 PM

very beautifully written LuLoo congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2016 4:13:00 PM

thank you lovely Jan :)-luloo

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/7/2016 3:02:00 PM

Very beautiful, Laura, and so deserving of your top of the podium First Place win. Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2016 3:08:00 PM

Thank you sweet Sandra:)-luloo

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 9/7/2016 2:45:00 PM

Congratulations Laura on the first placement of the contest. A poem that summarizes the core of a second chance.

Lu Loo
Date: 9/7/2016 3:05:00 PM

oh my, thank you so much Nayda! I am so grateful you found it winning worthy, be blessed :)-luloo

Constance La France

Date: 9/3/2016 1:54:00 PM

Laura, wonderfully penned by your talented pen , best of luck ~

Lu Loo
Date: 9/4/2016 11:54:00 AM

Thank you lovely Broken Wings :)-luloo

Frederic Parker

Date: 9/2/2016 1:30:00 PM

there is a line in a rod mckuen song.. If You Go Away.."leave me just enough love to hold in my hand"..Dusty Springfield's version my favorite..your poem made me think of it ..good luck in the contest

Lu Loo
Date: 9/2/2016 1:35:00 PM

no way...He is my favorite poet/songwriter Frederic! I have never heard that song before tho? wow, that's awesome thank you for letting me know :)-luloo