Take Me Back

Take me back to my days with you
Are you listening to my prayers O’ Mother
I want to rush into your arms and play
To see you lift me like a feather

I sneak into your clothes like old
You scold me and fight like a child
I crib and cry, you take me in your lap
Sharing with me, little stories with claps

Where are you, My Dear Mother
I glance up at the starry sky
You cannot leave me behind O Mother
This place is hell, I want to fly

Why do those live, who dump their child
Yet call themselves Mothers
Why should you leave when I need you
You cant do this to me O’ Mother

Tomorrow when I will awake,
Will I not hear your gentle tone?
I think not for my heart will break,
With thoughts that are still so unknown.

Oh, tell me, Mother, tell me now!
Please give me answers that I seek
So tell me why and tell me how
Now who will listen when I speak?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 11/2/2010 6:54:00 PM
Dear Suresh, I like this one very much, it has depth, feeling and a message - a longing "who will listen when I speak" and thanks much for your kind thoughts re my "A Poem" Jim Gibbons
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Date: 6/4/2010 5:10:00 AM
this is so well written... please continue to share
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Date: 5/30/2010 8:44:00 PM
I hope that helps. And now, I really enjoyed reading this one. It reminded me of a child left at a nursery. But mostly it reminded me of a grown person remembering being left alone or wanting his mother back again. Yes, I am sure that is what it meant. Very heartfelt! Your deep longing! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 5/30/2010 8:42:00 PM
To answer your question on how to categorize your poems, well, I was thinking what form this one could be. the last half of it was definitely rhymed, but the first few stanzas were not, so I guess in that case, you would call it 'quatrains" for being four line stanzas. So if you keep rhyme all the way thru, call your poems "rhymed." If lines of four, call them rhymed or quatrains. Or you can say "lyrical" if they are like this one, with such a nice flow. Narrative for longer story like poems.
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