Tablet

Fierce little whirlwind Swirling and folding, effervescing Substance collision, a nucleus Tiny fireworks rising then bursting A globe in a bucket of acid Being consumed, absorbed fully, watching This miniature landscape burning up Under the weight of its own sun Dispersing completely, another world In a glass of milky way

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Lena Pate

Date: 5/14/2009 8:23:00 PM

The beginning of a universe or the extinction of a star? Regardless I can see it blazing across the sky in all its glory. I loved the last lines imagery.

Arany P.

Date: 4/19/2009 2:47:00 AM

your look about life around is always interesting to me ... 'Under the weight of its own sun' ... that is my fav line! well written piece, Nathaniel! :) ~ Arany

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 4/18/2009 7:12:00 PM

This is so original...wonderful write. Love the last lie. BG

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/18/2009 9:24:00 AM

Love the way you describe the tablet "Swirling and folding, effervescing," Nathaniel. Great imagery in this original and creative write. Well done! Love, Carolyn