Swirling Black

If you thought
You could find him
In the swirling black
At the end of the night
After he held your hand
And told you to run
You were wrong.
If you thought
You could find him
At the end
Of a lit cigarette
Waiting for your name
To blow up his phone
You were wrong.

He was at the end
Of the swirling black
In the bottom of the green
Glass bottle
It tasted like liquorice 
And bitter romance
In the mottled light
Of an early morning sunrise.
He was at the end
Of a lit cigarette
Watching through
Smoke rising in the 
Darkness
Gone as quickly
As you could inhale.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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August 23, 2015 at 12:08 AM
Hannah, Congratulations on having your poem featured on the homepage. **SKAT**
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August 8, 2015 at 12:07 AM
Hi Hannah, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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August 5, 2015 at 1:17 AM
Hey there, welcome to Poetrysoup, Hannah. "It tasted like liquorice And bitter romance" I am intrigued by your many memorable lines.... this is fantastic! A real pleasure to read your work! I will be definitely read the other you posted on here. The ending is brilliantly chilling. Always, Laura
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August 4, 2015 at 9:32 PM
Hannah Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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August 5, 2015 at 1:12 AM
Hi SKAT :) It's such an honor to have you come and say hello! I am enjoying reading all the beautiful poems posted and hope someday I will be part of making something great, through helping others with their poetry. I would love love LOVE some feedback on the two poems I've already posted before I post some more. I hope to hear from you again soon and I will be visiting your page again to read some more of your work!
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