Swimming in Grief

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Fictional poem for contest sponsored by Sara Jama

It is as if cloudy eyes forecast rain And the darkest heartache Bleeds grief like varicose veins All blue and distorted with pain Hope is aborted and sadness Is a black freight train of thoughts Drowning my wake my sleep my faith I try to smile through it but fail A grimace of green slides in a wail Finding no comfort in other widows My grief is a powerful hurricane sucking soul Drowning in grief stuck lamenting No poem strong enough for venting Every emotion a shadow of grey Will I ever find light again in day

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Valsa George

Date: 3/24/2025 4:34:00 AM

"Hope is aborted and sadness Is a black freight train of thoughts".... Very powerful lines, carrying so much weight like the freight train. Dark melancholy rules. Dear Karen, Congratulations on your well deserved placement.

Karen Jones
Date: 3/24/2025 6:45:00 AM

Thank you Valsa you are kind!

CayCay Jennings

Date: 3/23/2025 10:40:00 AM

Me thinketh you are an old soul and, thus, have the ability to feel what you haven't even experienced in this lifetime. That happens to me, too. This is grief beautifully expressed. I can't believe it sat unread. Congratulations and admiration ... CayCay

Karen Jones
Date: 3/23/2025 11:17:00 AM

Like you I often emphasize with other’s pain. Thanks for reading and I think it’s so sad that’s is why these type poems may not be read as much.

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/23/2025 9:01:00 AM

Dear Karen, your poem is a powerful expression of grief. I was especially struck by "Finding no comfort in other widows" - wow! Exquisite pain expressed with finesse. Congratulations for your success in Sara's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Karen Jones
Date: 3/23/2025 9:57:00 AM

Thank you Susan!