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Sweetest Touch

As she so carelessly walks by her elegance fills the air The beauty of her eyes The flowing carelessnes of her hair And it seems she doesnt mind She sent me to despair She can look into my eyes as though she doesnt care I still hate her with all of my being I cant hate her enough But that still doesnt mean She doesnt have the sweetest touch

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Danielle Cooper

Date: 2/23/2012 10:09:00 AM

Amazing words and emotions.

Nick Bagnall

Date: 2/23/2012 6:20:00 AM

This is a nice poem, with an interesting though behind it, and so true on many levels. Please tidy it up, you've an s missing on line 4 and apostrophies on lines 5, 8, 10, 11 & 12. This is not an ABC formed poem please select somethjing more appropriate such as rhyme. Still a nice poem though :)

Charles Jefferson
Date: 2/23/2012 12:22:00 PM

I dont know anything about forms so I just pick the first one. And apostrophies are not really so necessary seeing as though you understood everything I said. Perhaps if my poem had to many grammatical errors as to where it was unreadable....regardless thanks for the critique.