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         Greg's Dazzling of the Deep Field Contest

October 6, 2025

Sweet Torment in Shadows

knowing...

if stars should fade when I'm with you
   and darkness reigns in midnight blue
I would croon while we rendezvous
   sultry lyrics in your ear...
love songs of a balladeer

whispers fondling your neck and face
   caressing each exotic place
'til breathless in my warm embrace
   there's teasing with finger tips 
and tasting from parted lips

our passion stirs without disguise
   your need escapes in moans and sighs
I kiss the lids of your closed eyes
   there's beauty found in the dark...
when a kiss ignites a spark

our tongues entwine like flames of fire
   for want of more, we both conspire
carnal fervor transcends desire
   both yearning to sate this thirst...
ardor nearing a cloudburst

in night's gloaming, we were discreet
   fulgent beauty, tryst in retreat
love evidenced with each heartbeat
   dazzling hours of sweet torment...
in shadows our time was spent

   sweet torment... in shadows

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Susan Ashley October 28, 2025 at 6:27 PM Dear Lin, congratulations for your sizzling success in Gregory’s contest with your luscious, sensuous poem. “ardor nearing a cloudburst” - wow! Sweet torment, indeed! Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan

Duke Beaufort October 6, 2025 at 3:01 PM Lin, you have the ability to write about so many different subjects. This certainly elucidates the passion of being in love or at least attracted strongly to another. We'd hope lovers could experience their love openly, but alas...sometimes it's not acceptable. I suppose shadows will always do when a motel room is not available. They could also be a metaphor for something we need to hide. Food for thought!! Smiles!! Lin Lane October 7, 2025 at 8:02 AM A touch in the dark heightens the senses. It doesn’t matter where or when. It matters who. Thanks, Duke.

Jan Allison October 6, 2025 at 11:43 AM ooh err mrs this is a steamy little number. I think Greg will love this gem! hugs jan xx Lin Lane October 6, 2025 at 12:07 PM ;-) Thanks, Jan. Greg is a master of steamy poetry.

John Lawless October 6, 2025 at 8:10 AM WHOA.....Someone's going to bed without supper.....I just took two valium and a cold shower after reading this,,,this could be titled "always leave 'em wanting more" Great job Lin...are you sure it wasn't you in the garden....with that apple....looking for Adam Lin Lane October 6, 2025 at 8:19 AM Bit of a cardio workout for you, John? Not looking for an Adam. I'm glad you enjoyed it... or I'm thinking you did. ;-)