Sweet Deathly Rose

Oh, mild flower I chanced to meet,
A ruby red, yet so discreet.
She'd never seen a hue my blue.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Her fragrance wafted on the breeze,
And all were drawn to her with ease.
I put down roots near her and grew.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Though in her garden all seems well,
there still are things she hates to tell.
Her thorns, a shield, conceal what's true.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Beneath her thorns, resentment grows.
Disturb her and her petals close!
I learned too well what could ensue. . . 
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A casual remark was said.
Her ruby rose turned scarlet red. . .
I guiltless pled. Did I misdo?
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A fury she had kept so deep
had been unleashed; it made me weep.
Retaliation cut me through.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A leaf of peace she offered me:
Be friends, but only partially.
But I refused and shall eschew
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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West Avatar
November 2, 2024 at 5:04 PM
Well done!
Dietrich Avatar
November 4, 2024 at 3:29 PM
Dang. You don't have any shows for me to see
Sergi Avatar
June 10, 2017 at 3:38 PM
A beautiful poem, my compliments Andrea!
Paul Avatar
June 10, 2017 at 6:04 AM
wonderful write-up Andrea. Do love it.
Johnson Avatar
June 6, 2017 at 9:40 PM
Hi Andrea, this is so well written. This so speaks to me in regards to my lost relationship. In the beginning it's everything you've never knew you wanted and then some how life or something creeps in and the next thing you know you're living a life of regret. I love it. Not the pain, the poem. :)
Wood Avatar
June 6, 2017 at 5:40 PM
Very well written. Kind of a prickly situation though. ;)
Brian Avatar
June 6, 2017 at 1:56 PM
A clear message with vivid expression. Loved it.
A   Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 5:35 PM
ANDREA, Congratulations on your winning poem.... xox~ Linda
George   Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 6:53 AM
What a fantastic metaphorical rendering you have created here, Andrea. Number 1 in my books. Elaine
Stephens Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 4:13 AM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your win. Interesting way in which your rose had human characteristics. Particularly "disturb her and her petals close". A rose in a strop, genius! Regards Theresa xx
Dom Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 7:35 PM
Andrea, me 7. Sweet deathly rose...
Deschler Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 5:41 PM
I loved the repetition of the lines, the effortless flow of your words, and the rhyme. Your poem stood out because of the darker atmosphere of the story. A really great poem, Andrea! Congratulations on your win!
Puddifoot Avatar
December 2, 2011 at 9:39 AM
wow andrea, I LOVE this! unusual for me as I'm not always keen on forms that use repetition, but this is so well written, bittersweet and deep, congrats!
Macfarlane Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 8:25 PM
Excellent write......congrats on your win!
Freeman Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 6:34 PM
A beautifully written Kyrielle Andrea. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses
Stinson Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 6:07 PM
Very, very well-written! Congratulations in the contest.
Arno Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 5:08 PM
Congratulations on your win :)
Arowolo Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 12:56 PM
Awesome ,Andrea.Congratulations on your win...
Johnson Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 8:58 AM
Lots of meaning here. Congratulations Andrea. Love, Joyce
Quigley Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 8:40 AM
Just beautiful Andrea. I love it. Congrats on your win. Well deserved.
M V Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 7:03 AM
It is fantastic, Andrea.Congratulations on your win!
Brown Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 6:36 AM
Congratulations on your placement in my contest Andrea. You all left a piece of yourselves on this contest page. It was so very hard to judge. I am asking you all to read and comment on all the winners here. You will go away seeing into the hearts of all the winners. This was a very emotional contest for me. Thank you all for supporting this contest. Love and blessing to you all, Carol
Foulk Avatar
June 12, 2011 at 10:19 AM
this was a lovely piece of poetry, give it a 7. thank you for commenting on I wish I was a Cloud.
Horne Avatar
June 12, 2011 at 5:31 AM
Wow, I love this, Andrea. Thanks for introducing me to yet another form that I'll have to try! And thanks for all your kind comments : )
Poet Avatar
January 13, 2011 at 10:48 AM
Another gem of a poem!Enjoyed-kashinath
Chachere Avatar
March 7, 2010 at 11:46 PM
This deathly rose sounds beautiful(: you wrote this well. i think i might favorite. -Always&Forever Lynette
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