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Sweet Deathly Rose

Oh, mild flower I chanced to meet,
A ruby red, yet so discreet.
She'd never seen a hue my blue.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Her fragrance wafted on the breeze,
And all were drawn to her with ease.
I put down roots near her and grew.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Though in her garden all seems well,
there still are things she hates to tell.
Her thorns, a shield, conceal what's true.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Beneath her thorns, resentment grows.
Disturb her and her petals close!
I learned too well what could ensue. . . 
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A casual remark was said.
Her ruby rose turned scarlet red. . .
I guiltless pled. Did I misdo?
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A fury she had kept so deep
had been unleashed; it made me weep.
Retaliation cut me through.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A leaf of peace she offered me:
Be friends, but only partially.
But I refused and shall eschew
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.



Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 6/10/2017 3:38:00 PM
A beautiful poem, my compliments Andrea!
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:04:00 AM
wonderful write-up Andrea. Do love it.
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Date: 6/6/2017 9:40:00 PM
Hi Andrea, this is so well written. This so speaks to me in regards to my lost relationship. In the beginning it's everything you've never knew you wanted and then some how life or something creeps in and the next thing you know you're living a life of regret. I love it. Not the pain, the poem. :)
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Date: 6/6/2017 5:40:00 PM
Very well written. Kind of a prickly situation though. ;)
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Date: 6/6/2017 1:56:00 PM
A clear message with vivid expression. Loved it.
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Date: 4/3/2014 2:21:00 PM
Andrea, this is BRILLIANT!! I love those story symbolized by rose and thorn. The master was on here game here. A top win in my book !
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Date: 4/2/2014 5:35:00 PM
ANDREA, Congratulations on your winning poem.... xox~ Linda
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Date: 4/1/2014 6:53:00 AM
What a fantastic metaphorical rendering you have created here, Andrea. Number 1 in my books. Elaine
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Date: 4/1/2014 4:13:00 AM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your win. Interesting way in which your rose had human characteristics. Particularly "disturb her and her petals close". A rose in a strop, genius! Regards Theresa xx
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Date: 3/31/2014 7:35:00 PM
Andrea, me 7. Sweet deathly rose...
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Date: 3/31/2014 5:41:00 PM
I loved the repetition of the lines, the effortless flow of your words, and the rhyme. Your poem stood out because of the darker atmosphere of the story. A really great poem, Andrea! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/2/2011 9:39:00 AM
wow andrea, I LOVE this! unusual for me as I'm not always keen on forms that use repetition, but this is so well written, bittersweet and deep, congrats!
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Date: 12/1/2011 8:25:00 PM
Excellent write......congrats on your win!
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Date: 12/1/2011 6:34:00 PM
A beautifully written Kyrielle Andrea. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 12/1/2011 6:07:00 PM
Very, very well-written! Congratulations in the contest.
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Date: 12/1/2011 5:08:00 PM
Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 12/1/2011 12:56:00 PM
Awesome ,Andrea.Congratulations on your win...
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Date: 12/1/2011 8:58:00 AM
Lots of meaning here. Congratulations Andrea. Love, Joyce
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Date: 12/1/2011 8:40:00 AM
Just beautiful Andrea. I love it. Congrats on your win. Well deserved.
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Date: 12/1/2011 7:03:00 AM
It is fantastic, Andrea.Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/1/2011 6:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in my contest Andrea. You all left a piece of yourselves on this contest page. It was so very hard to judge. I am asking you all to read and comment on all the winners here. You will go away seeing into the hearts of all the winners. This was a very emotional contest for me. Thank you all for supporting this contest. Love and blessing to you all, Carol
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Date: 6/12/2011 10:19:00 AM
this was a lovely piece of poetry, give it a 7. thank you for commenting on I wish I was a Cloud.
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Date: 6/12/2011 5:31:00 AM
Wow, I love this, Andrea. Thanks for introducing me to yet another form that I'll have to try! And thanks for all your kind comments : )
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Date: 1/13/2011 10:48:00 AM
Another gem of a poem!Enjoyed-kashinath
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Date: 3/7/2010 11:46:00 PM
This deathly rose sounds beautiful(: you wrote this well. i think i might favorite. -Always&Forever Lynette
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