The Grahamburglar Poet Triolet

Sweats and Sweets

You broke it off and you broke my heart
so today; I stayed inside crying -- 
wearing blue sweats from the dollar-mart.
You broke it off and you broke my heart
I’ll finish the ice cream and then I’ll start
a new box of chocolates, denying…
You broke it off and you broke my heart
so today; I stayed inside crying.

06/14/15

Entry for Contest: SWEATS and SWEETS
Hosted by: Olive Eloisa Guillermo

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Eileen Manassian June 20, 2015 at 8:27 AM I really enjoyed this write. Oh...the comfort of chocolate! You really did well by the theme. Good luck in the contest.

Emile Pinet June 17, 2015 at 2:17 PM A poem that flirts with the reader's emotions and tries to make light of tears that fall from saddened eye. Emile.

Skat A June 15, 2015 at 2:24 AM good luck in the contest

Jaycee Cervenka June 14, 2015 at 9:12 PM Great job Preston. Good luck in the contest. The Grahamburglar June 14, 2015 at 10:44 PM Thanks Janet. =)

Lewis Raynes June 14, 2015 at 8:18 PM i love this simple, direct poem, strong 7 here. The Grahamburglar June 14, 2015 at 10:44 PM Thanks Lewis. I personally find the triolet to be a deceptively difficult form to use. I honestly don't think it ever sounds quite right when I try to use it, so I am glad you appreciate this one.