Swarming Highland

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Written: November 06, 2023 ___________________________________________ A swarm of herring gulls amassed Nexus Nautilus nabbed by zealous winds, whitening the black soil we hold spears in our hands. blood-stained thorns on the side sullen squawks a skirmishing sporophyte, dubious, grayish rumors must be buried drave in a drizzle, drape to deities. Installation of sentry fences Sisyphean stones anchor down using seal and string flaws in the swings used by blacksmiths Unborn burning bullion bludgeon Savage sunless swords embryonic Edgeless, with no reflections. Each peak over the Edenic Steppes is sprayed, using torn paper candles as bait climbing scaffolds with lumber rungs pounding of leather-heavy boots darkened, grimacing features Flocks failing feathers or flight. Our hold slips on windswept Windswept updrafts carry us away as offspring of the royal family.

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Deb M

Date: 11/7/2023 1:33:00 PM

Amazing imagery and poem Lasaad! Debx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/7/2023 6:37:00 AM

A lovely write! The imagery here is phenomenal! I love the variation of line length - keeps my attention. Those first four lines drew me in, packed a punch, my mind swooning with imagination! So well done, Lasaad! Fave!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/7/2023 5:15:00 AM

Unique poetry, in your unique voice, my friend. Your muse shines in everything your write.

Ink Empress

Date: 11/7/2023 1:10:00 AM

Dear Sotto, this is such a strong and powerful write that describes so much using alliterations and exquisite imagery! As always such brilliant diction and i like how you’ve also done free verse here, flows so seamlessly! I especially love the lines “ we hold spears in our hands. blood-stained thorns on the side“ soul hitting really! How moving is that and your word choices are impeccable! As always enjoyed reading your work! True art it is, whatever you weave!

Bill Baker

Date: 11/6/2023 4:39:00 PM

Your imagery and descriptions are so precise it's like you were there in the battle. I felt like I was there too! Very engaging poetry, my friend. Write On! Bill

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 11/6/2023 4:02:00 PM

your voice is very clear and soothing, really enjoyed the poem and the recital Sotto

Paige Hind

Date: 11/6/2023 3:24:00 PM

This is such a haunting read, Sotto. I love the part "grimacing features Flocks failing feathers or flight." Such a gift you have!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/6/2023 2:57:00 PM

dearest Sotto--I loved the beautifully sequenced alliterative phrases. They sounded almost melodic in contrast to what I perceive is a bloody battle scene. Your use of "Sisyphean" was brilliant! Your poem was remarkably engaging. Your creative spirit shines through your words and images. Perfection, blessings, Sara