Barry Stebbings Poet Choka

Swan

Swan

     Oh! serene spirit,

     White gowned on sun flecked waters.

     Majestic in your slow glide.

     What intelligence

     Guides you silently along

     The river’s strong flowing path?


     Choka		5 7 7 5 7 7
     Checked by Howmanysyllables.com

      3/01/17

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Mahtab Bangalee December 18, 2018 at 9:56 PM swan's wandering path a clue of serenity !// lovely penned Barry Stebbings December 19, 2018 at 9:14 AM Thank you very much, Mahtab. // Barry

Andrea Dietrich December 8, 2017 at 6:35 PM ah, yes, I had found it already , back in January of last year!! The original gem. Barry Stebbings December 10, 2017 at 4:44 AM Thank you, Andrea. // Barry

Heidi Sands March 9, 2017 at 5:22 PM This is beautiful Barry :) Barry Stebbings March 10, 2017 at 2:44 AM Thank you very much, Heidi. // Barry

Afzal Nusker January 9, 2017 at 6:52 AM Beautifully written Choka. Congrats on your win, Barry. Barry Stebbings January 9, 2017 at 7:06 AM Thank you very much, Afzul. // Barry

Andrea Dietrich January 8, 2017 at 6:42 PM this is very pretty, Barry. Not many tanka are this beautiful!! Barry Stebbings January 9, 2017 at 5:51 AM Thank you very much, Andrea. // Barry

Daniel Turner January 3, 2017 at 1:54 PM Don't really know much about chokas Barry but I like what you have written. Swans are beautiful creatures indeed:) Barry Stebbings January 3, 2017 at 2:01 PM Thank you very much, Daniel. First time I have tried this form. // Barry.

John Fleming January 3, 2017 at 1:32 PM I find this all rather good, Barry...Nicely penned (No pun intended). All the very best! :) john Barry Stebbings January 3, 2017 at 1:49 PM Thank you very much, John. // Barry