Swan

Swan Oh! serene spirit, White gowned on sun flecked waters. Majestic in your slow glide. What intelligence Guides you silently along The river’s strong flowing path? Choka 5 7 7 5 7 7 Checked by Howmanysyllables.com 3/01/17

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 12/18/2018 9:56:00 PM

swan's wandering path a clue of serenity !// lovely penned

Barry Stebbings
Date: 12/19/2018 9:14:00 AM

Thank you very much, Mahtab. // Barry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2017 6:35:00 PM

ah, yes, I had found it already , back in January of last year!! The original gem.

Barry Stebbings
Date: 12/10/2017 4:44:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. // Barry

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/9/2017 5:22:00 PM

This is beautiful Barry :)

Barry Stebbings
Date: 3/10/2017 2:44:00 AM

Thank you very much, Heidi. // Barry

Afzal Nusker

Date: 1/9/2017 6:52:00 AM

Beautifully written Choka. Congrats on your win, Barry.

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/9/2017 7:06:00 AM

Thank you very much, Afzul. // Barry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/8/2017 6:42:00 PM

this is very pretty, Barry. Not many tanka are this beautiful!!

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/9/2017 5:51:00 AM

Thank you very much, Andrea. // Barry

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/3/2017 1:54:00 PM

Don't really know much about chokas Barry but I like what you have written. Swans are beautiful creatures indeed:)

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/3/2017 2:01:00 PM

Thank you very much, Daniel. First time I have tried this form. // Barry.

John Fleming

Date: 1/3/2017 1:32:00 PM

I find this all rather good, Barry...Nicely penned (No pun intended). All the very best! :) john

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/3/2017 1:49:00 PM

Thank you very much, John. // Barry