Wilma Neels Poet Free verse

'suspended'

drifting in and out 
or was it the other way around?

floating away
instead of towards what made sense 
both suspended in the air 
with only recognition as their measurement

he wanted out 
she wanted in 
he pulled away 
her wish was for something more meaningful 

there they were 
trapped in something 
that held them captive 

too afraid to make the first move 
too afraid of what might happen 

suspended 
hanging onto promises 
both of them have forgotten 

with their feet halfway in the air

still drifting in and out
or was it the other way around?

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Carol Sunshine Brown January 4, 2012 at 11:00 AM Congratulations on making it through the 1st round of PoetrySoup International Contest. Wishing you the best in the finals Wilma. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson December 28, 2011 at 7:40 PM Congratulations on your early success in the contest. Good luck. Love, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich December 28, 2011 at 6:22 PM Congratulations on getting thru to round two of Soup's contest with the kind of poetry you do best: love and its many gateways!

Goode Guy November 20, 2011 at 8:04 AM W Neels, I like how the last stanza is a repeat of 1st...kinda like the topic itself...suspended in time we are. ;-)

Poet Destroyer A November 16, 2011 at 9:49 PM Hi..Wilma... how are you??? as for me..I'm stopping by to checkout all the poems,,, being featured... lol..i keep getting congrats..on my campfire poem.... Well i spot your poem first... you have yourself a very strong imagination... love the assumption here... congrats on your featured poem,, have a good night,..p.d.

Nick Bagnall November 16, 2011 at 7:05 AM Congrats on being featured this week, this is a lovely poem to read, something in the flow I think makes it easy to read, slightly melancholy topic, but greatly enjoyed none the less.

Carol Sunshine Brown November 16, 2011 at 6:16 AM Congratulations on being featured this week Wilma. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta November 16, 2011 at 2:39 AM Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Wilma

David William Breidenthal November 16, 2011 at 12:47 AM WOW, what a fantastic poem! Congrats for featured poem this week! You earned it for sure! (David)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart November 15, 2011 at 8:12 PM Congrats Wilma on featured poem this week on PS.. an amazing write to share with luv my friend..

Vince Suzadail Jr. November 15, 2011 at 1:59 PM Congrats Wilma. Sometimes we don't see it until it's too late. This was a creative wonderful write and a deserving feature. Vince

Lee Ramage July 27, 2011 at 12:25 AM Very nice. Lee

Dr.Ram Mehta July 21, 2011 at 6:34 PM What I enjoyed the most are images and the way you have done it , Wilma

Andrea Dietrich July 21, 2011 at 4:09 PM what a great title for this image of them, Wilma. What made you think of this? You always come up with intreaguing stuff!!

Carolyn Devonshire July 21, 2011 at 3:15 PM Wow, I know so many relationships that are hanging in "suspension" now, Wilma. Neither party has the courage to face change. Excellent free verse, dear. I'm trying to catch up a bit. Love you, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 21, 2011 at 11:12 AM too late, you got me laughing again, hahaha! go love all of them balls lol :D you ball lover you hahaha! hug those balls for me will ya? ok ok i will try to stop laughing now

Nette Onclaud July 21, 2011 at 10:01 AM wilms, so artistically presented in this very special way with fantastic images. you baffled me and i like that... wow! :) huggs, nette

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 21, 2011 at 9:42 AM Ah, the mysteries and foncusion that love can bring! Sure can be puzzling, yup never do know which side is up, which side is down, or is it the other way around?? Very cool write...mwahugs missy :D

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 21, 2011 at 8:51 AM Wilma u constantly amaze me.. this is another fav for me luv.. so extended in expressions and the emotion is super charged luv.. is it for a contest? good luck if so..it should be a winner..

Black Eyed Susan July 21, 2011 at 8:36 AM I guess that's why some people stay together. hopefully in time, they'll realize that it's not meaningful anymore and call it quits, or, find new meaning in their relationship to propel them out of this "place" good depiction of this :)

Jack Horne July 21, 2011 at 7:40 AM Yes, I think we've all been there. Clever piece, Wilma.

Zzzzz Zzzzz July 21, 2011 at 6:59 AM Love can be confusing and cause friction along the way. A very interesting write with some strong imagery. Well done. Love, Robert.

Robert A. Dufresne July 21, 2011 at 4:55 AM hmmm, it does sound confusing,Wilma. Brings back memories and I hope they stay just memories! Sounds like time to back up and regroup! Choose to have a tremendous day, Wilma. :)