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Susie's Sunny Summers

Susie Smith spent several summers swimming salty seas Surfing seemed safer than slippery slopes on snow skis Until susie was swiftly swallowed by swells of super size and several sand sharks startled her in a shocked surprise Susie Smith still spends sunny summers on sandy shores shooing away seagulls that steal her scrumptious smores Susie searches for sea shells and starfish in shallow shoals squealing as sudden summer squalls soak her as she strolls December 30, 2020 Tongue Twister Challenge Sponsored by: Joe Sandler

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Christian Alexander

Date: 1/23/2021 12:33:00 AM

Awesome write Jenna, this one is a real winner. Thank you-

Jenna Logan
Date: 1/23/2021 1:27:00 AM

Thank you for reading me and leaving such a kind comment, Christian, but it was only given an honorable mention. The remarks from those beneath and yours are my prize.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/31/2020 9:28:00 PM

Wow! This is so beautifully penned! Magnifico Maestro!

Jenna Logan
Date: 1/1/2021 3:36:00 AM

Thank you, thank you, Caren. Your comments are so encouraging.

Lei Strauss

Date: 12/31/2020 4:59:00 AM

Wow, this is beauty. Tfs!

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/31/2020 6:45:00 PM

Thanks a lot, Lei.

Sally Eslinger

Date: 12/30/2020 9:57:00 PM

A delightful read, each line a story surprise. More! Would like to read more!

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/31/2020 3:00:00 AM

Thank you very much for the kind remarks, Sally.

Joe Sandler

Date: 12/30/2020 8:03:00 PM

I know a girl named Jenna Jonna Jay. She puts her poems on display. They are tremendous.They are stupendous. Does it her own special way.She is the best.YES! Above the rest.YES! I know a girl named Jenna Jonna Jay.

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/31/2020 2:59:00 AM

Hi Joe Sandler, the rhyming panhandler. I appreciate the generous kudos. Thank you.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/30/2020 7:50:00 PM

I think that this one didn't just twist my tongue... I think that I swallowed it whole! lol. Susie sure sent me! ~ Suds, shakes, slurps, sips...

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/31/2020 2:58:00 AM

oops, GW. Get it back and thanks for the great comment.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/30/2020 12:28:00 PM

This will take some beating Jenna, you've composed this so well. Good luck in the contest Tom

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:31:00 PM

Thank you, Tom. I'm just happy that so many poets have responded so positively to it. That's a win for me.

Rico Leffanta

Date: 12/30/2020 10:37:00 AM

Whether or not you win the contest, this is certain to become a drama coach classic! Aloha! Rico

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:30:00 PM

That's quite a compliment, Rico. Thanks very much.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 12/30/2020 7:38:00 AM

Jenna, It's fun trying to read your poem quickly only to discover a pretty story as it unfolds. Good luck! -Richard

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:30:00 PM

I read it aloud a couple of times and smiled near the middle. It was a happy write. Thanks, Richard.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/30/2020 6:56:00 AM

Fabulous use of alliteration, Jenna! The sand sharks may startle us, but they do us no harm. I'm terrified of some sharks, so I usually don't swim in the ocean. Wishing you success in the contest as well as a wonderful new year! Hugs, carolyn

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:28:00 PM

I have no fear of sand sharks either, but it's the biggies that I stay away from It's their ocean! Thanks for the wel wishes for the contest and New Year, Carolyn, and I wish the same for you.

Mark Koplin

Date: 12/30/2020 5:22:00 AM

That was great fun to read! Well done, wow! I love it!

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:27:00 PM

and fun to write, too! Thanks a lot, Mark.

David Walker

Date: 12/30/2020 5:21:00 AM

Simply put, Susie Smith Certainly Sounds Solidly Sain. Senseless sentiments seem unnecessary Since Science Sets the Scene for the Same sort of solute of solitude, a solvent of the servant's heart. I Like it.. LOL

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:27:00 PM

The 'solute of solitude" now there a poem title for sure! Thanks very much, David.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/30/2020 5:12:00 AM

wow an awesome tongue twister and excellent rhyming, I was also using the name Susie in my poem i will change it to Sally:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/30/2020 1:26:00 PM

It was such fun to write this one, Jan. I had 4 lines, then thought of something....and then something else, so I made myself stop before my tongue became so twisted that it might have fallen off! Thanks for you support.