Jenna Logan Poet Rhyme

Susie's Sunny Summers

Susie Smith spent several summers swimming salty seas
Surfing seemed safer than slippery slopes on snow skis
Until susie was swiftly swallowed by swells of super size 
and several sand sharks startled her in a shocked surprise
Susie Smith still spends sunny summers on sandy shores
shooing away seagulls that steal her scrumptious smores
Susie searches for sea shells and starfish in shallow shoals
squealing as sudden summer squalls soak her as she strolls




December 30, 2020
Tongue Twister Challenge
Sponsored by:  Joe Sandler

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Christian Alexander January 23, 2021 at 12:33 AM Awesome write Jenna, this one is a real winner. Thank you- Jenna Logan January 23, 2021 at 1:27 AM Thank you for reading me and leaving such a kind comment, Christian, but it was only given an honorable mention. The remarks from those beneath and yours are my prize.

Caren Krutsinger December 31, 2020 at 9:28 PM Wow! This is so beautifully penned! Magnifico Maestro! Jenna Logan January 1, 2021 at 3:36 AM Thank you, thank you, Caren. Your comments are so encouraging.

Lei Strauss December 31, 2020 at 4:59 AM Wow, this is beauty. Tfs! Jenna Logan December 31, 2020 at 6:45 PM Thanks a lot, Lei.

Sally Eslinger December 30, 2020 at 9:57 PM A delightful read, each line a story surprise. More! Would like to read more! Jenna Logan December 31, 2020 at 3:00 AM Thank you very much for the kind remarks, Sally.

Joe Sandler December 30, 2020 at 8:03 PM I know a girl named Jenna Jonna Jay. She puts her poems on display. They are tremendous.They are stupendous. Does it her own special way.She is the best.YES! Above the rest.YES! I know a girl named Jenna Jonna Jay. Jenna Logan December 31, 2020 at 2:59 AM Hi Joe Sandler, the rhyming panhandler. I appreciate the generous kudos. Thank you.

Gershon Wolf December 30, 2020 at 7:50 PM I think that this one didn't just twist my tongue... I think that I swallowed it whole! lol. Susie sure sent me! ~ Suds, shakes, slurps, sips... Jenna Logan December 31, 2020 at 2:58 AM oops, GW. Get it back and thanks for the great comment.

Tom Cunningham December 30, 2020 at 12:28 PM This will take some beating Jenna, you've composed this so well. Good luck in the contest Tom Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:31 PM Thank you, Tom. I'm just happy that so many poets have responded so positively to it. That's a win for me.

Rico Leffanta December 30, 2020 at 10:37 AM Whether or not you win the contest, this is certain to become a drama coach classic! Aloha! Rico Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:30 PM That's quite a compliment, Rico. Thanks very much.

Quoth Theraven December 30, 2020 at 7:38 AM Jenna, It's fun trying to read your poem quickly only to discover a pretty story as it unfolds. Good luck! -Richard Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:30 PM I read it aloud a couple of times and smiled near the middle. It was a happy write. Thanks, Richard.

Carolyn Devonshire December 30, 2020 at 6:56 AM Fabulous use of alliteration, Jenna! The sand sharks may startle us, but they do us no harm. I'm terrified of some sharks, so I usually don't swim in the ocean. Wishing you success in the contest as well as a wonderful new year! Hugs, carolyn Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:28 PM I have no fear of sand sharks either, but it's the biggies that I stay away from It's their ocean! Thanks for the wel wishes for the contest and New Year, Carolyn, and I wish the same for you.

Mark Koplin December 30, 2020 at 5:22 AM That was great fun to read! Well done, wow! I love it! Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:27 PM and fun to write, too! Thanks a lot, Mark.

David Walker December 30, 2020 at 5:21 AM Simply put, Susie Smith Certainly Sounds Solidly Sain. Senseless sentiments seem unnecessary Since Science Sets the Scene for the Same sort of solute of solitude, a solvent of the servant's heart. I Like it.. LOL Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:27 PM The 'solute of solitude" now there a poem title for sure! Thanks very much, David.

Jan Allison December 30, 2020 at 5:12 AM wow an awesome tongue twister and excellent rhyming, I was also using the name Susie in my poem i will change it to Sally:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Jenna Logan December 30, 2020 at 1:26 PM It was such fun to write this one, Jan. I had 4 lines, then thought of something....and then something else, so I made myself stop before my tongue became so twisted that it might have fallen off! Thanks for you support.