Surrendering Forever

Two hearts surrender
                                      To what can no longer be
                                  A ravaged heart self-deceived

                                        Desire out of breath
                                 Passion’s fever now grows cold
                                    Our words have fallen silent
      
                                       
                                         Grief akin to pain
                                        Surrendering forever
                                    Past the point of no return.

   written by: Lori McClure
       contest : Relationship Break-ups

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 3/31/2013 6:58:00 PM
Cryptically pleasing.... Just reading it brings understanding.... Jake
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Date: 10/13/2011 10:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Lori. Sorry to be late on comment. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/9/2011 1:56:00 AM
VERY nice, Lori, Congrats on ;your win.
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Date: 10/9/2011 12:50:00 AM
THE HEART,, IS A VERY FUNNY TRICK... ENJOYED YOUR POEM LORI,.. HAVE A NICE ONE,..P.D.
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Date: 10/9/2011 12:46:00 AM
LORI, CONGRATULATIONS ;-) ~ IN Russell Sivey, CONTEST.. GREAT ENTRY,..ALWAYS,..P.D.
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Date: 10/8/2011 11:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, well done. You do grieve relationships, so true. Lee
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Date: 10/8/2011 10:35:00 PM
Congrats on your win...very nice poem...Ed
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Date: 10/8/2011 4:25:00 PM
congrats on your win in the contest, I liked this one the first time I read it, simply put but captures the emotion perfectly...
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Date: 10/8/2011 2:31:00 PM
"Past the point of no return.". Great ending Lori!! Congratulations on your win in Russell's contest ;)
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Date: 10/5/2011 8:33:00 PM
"grief akin to pain" now there's a thought. Beauty write, Lori. Thanks~N
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