Kp Nunez Poet Triolet

Surf N' Summer -

Into the wake of waves he rides.

The surfer glides like bird in flight.

He slips, gets up, head on collides,

into the wake of waves he rides.

His graceful dance with winds and tides

shows love for ocean at first sight.

Into the wake of waves he rides;

the surfer glides like bird in flight.









29 May 2015
For Andrea Dietrich's Lovely Summer Triolet Contest

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Cona Adams July 2, 2015 at 7:52 AM Nice Triolet, Kim. Great imagery.

Andrea Dietrich June 17, 2015 at 10:07 PM YOu asked me for advice on how to do better next time, so I came here to remind myself of your poem. It is really good for words. The problem was minor and lay mainly in punctuation. You need to finish the sentences with a period instead of a comma. I notice several poets doing this, not just you. It was just lines 2 and 3! (oh, and remove the comma after line 5) The beat is RIGHT ON.

Kim Merryman June 15, 2015 at 9:30 AM A wonderful descriptive write, Kim! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim M.

Sandra Haight June 13, 2015 at 8:35 PM Hi Kim, I love how you brought that visual to life with your verbal imagery! Congrats on your nice win. Hugs, Sandra

Skat A June 13, 2015 at 6:29 PM KIM, Congratulations on your LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET ----- SKAT :-)

Paul Callus June 13, 2015 at 3:15 PM I'm so pleased to be back with congratulations, Kim! Much deserved. // paul

Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 5:42 AM Dropping back with my congrats Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 13, 2015 at 1:04 AM very nice one, Kim. Congrats in my contest.

Alexis Y. June 13, 2015 at 12:56 AM Kim, I just stopped by to say congrats on your win:)Alexis

Laura Hay June 4, 2015 at 4:46 PM Superb, great visual this paints in my mind! Rgds Laura

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 3, 2015 at 9:18 AM Kim, i love the lines,,, simply captivating bringing me there~olive eloisa =')

Pandita Sietesantos June 2, 2015 at 5:35 PM Brilliant write - magnificent imagery. This is definitely a winner in my books! I rate it a "7!" Well done, my firend! Pandita

Paul Callus June 2, 2015 at 3:51 PM Hi Kim! I see that you and I chose the same visual! Yet, we tackled it in completely different ways. I love yours, especially the "graceful dance with winds and tides". gl in the contest. hugs // paul

Emile Pinet June 2, 2015 at 12:42 PM Your words are bubbling over with fun and excitement, well in tune with the theme of surfing the waves. Emile.

Constance La France June 1, 2015 at 1:44 PM Kim, this is lovely for the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, shameonyou

Sara Kendrick June 1, 2015 at 12:07 PM Enjoyed reading your very descriptive contest entry..Reads like a winner to me..I can see the scene of a surfer in the crest of the wave and blue green water all around him..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Richard Lamoureux June 1, 2015 at 9:40 AM I feel like I am there!

Anne-Lise Andresen June 1, 2015 at 5:55 AM - Great to see when they ride the waves ..... but no thanks for me :) (You?) - A summery image, dear Kim - A wonderful poem! - Hope your weekend was great and relaxed - Good luck in the contest! - hugs & <3 // Anne-Lise :)

Laura Breidenthal May 31, 2015 at 7:46 AM Love this one, Kim! Always admire your talented words - genuine and lovely poetry! Always, Laura

Tim Smith May 30, 2015 at 9:26 PM Makes me want to head to the beach...I'll be on the boat watching the surfers.

Vera Duggan May 30, 2015 at 7:29 PM Kim very nice triolet as both Peter and Lindsay said sharks are our problem but surfing is a great sport, my nephew is one good luck in the contest and take care..........Vera.............

Lindsay Laurie May 29, 2015 at 5:46 PM G'day Kim... sounds good without sharks being mentioned. I felt like on the shore watching the surfer while I read your poem - good luck - Lindsay

Highwave Brian May 29, 2015 at 11:53 AM I like yours better than mine! Love it :-) especially the imagery from "His graceful dance with winds and tides,"

Richard Lamoureux May 29, 2015 at 9:27 AM Nope not a surfer but love playing in the ocean.

Richard Lamoureux May 29, 2015 at 8:54 AM This makes me long for the ocean!

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