Sunset

Flickering Adieu Sitting on beach chair Overlooking the silent sea Sun dips in sea cup Rusty golden light Engulfs the dim horizon Flickering adieu December 25, 2015 Contest: Theme #3 - Sunset Sponsor: A Poet Destroyer

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Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 11/25/2015 1:53:00 PM

I especially loved your second verse! brllliant phrasing in strict time to the 575 form. BRAVO Balveen! Best wishes, Keith

Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 11/25/2015 2:27:00 PM

But you got it RIGHT!!!!! Keith

Balveen Cheema
Date: 11/25/2015 2:14:00 PM

Thanks for your wishes, but I did not stand anywhere!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/19/2015 4:05:00 PM

this is really nice. I especially liked the first one. the last line of it was very much what I expect from a haiku.

Balveen Cheema
Date: 11/20/2015 5:19:00 AM

Thanks for complimenting, Andrea!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/18/2015 12:05:00 PM

- You've painted a beautiful picture in your haiku, Balveen - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Balveen Cheema
Date: 11/18/2015 12:27:00 PM

Thanks for your good wishes, Anne! Love, Balveen