Sunset

Crimson painted sky
Clouds drifting by like whispers
Light begins to fade



Copyright © 2009   Lena “Lolita” Townsend

*for Raul’s Nature’s Best Haiku Contest

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/29/2009 12:39:00 PM

Very descriptive Haiku here. I can see the sunset. Keep writing. Sara

Elaine George

Date: 9/17/2009 1:39:00 PM

BEAUTIFUL! Just beautiful, dear Lolita. lainie

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 6/28/2009 3:57:00 PM

I just love it! The imagery is crystal clear and refreshing. I can see myself relaxing in the sunset. Great job! ~Joseph

Brandee Augustus

Date: 6/28/2009 9:44:00 AM

I am really starting to love haikus. Every line of this one is just a perfect poetic description,

Brian Strand

Date: 6/24/2009 11:50:00 PM

Congrats on your success in Raul's contest Lolita.Rgds Brian

James Marshall Goff

Date: 6/24/2009 8:48:00 PM

breathless beauty! Lena! congrats on win! jim

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/24/2009 4:51:00 PM

Congratulations Lena on this lovely poem win!!

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 6/24/2009 4:07:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in Raul's contest! Love the second line! ~Trudy~

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/24/2009 3:20:00 PM

Just beautiful..congrats on your win in the contest. Barbara

Raul Moreno

Date: 6/24/2009 2:08:00 PM

Lolita, congrats on your success in my contest...Raul

Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/17/2009 9:13:00 PM

Cool =D Sunsets are just so magical and metaphysical in a visual way jojojo people usually do not appreciate the whole trascendance of their manifestation, but you really do and express very well =) thanks for the experience and for the comments =D indeed the point about my poetry is taking daily life and reality to a very different context...to make it different and not so boring...among other things =D wiii

Izzy Gumbo

Date: 5/17/2009 6:17:00 PM

This is beautiful Lolita. It brings a memory of a seaside I used to live near, a sunset walk I used to take there, yes... now it's here in the parks. :) Hugs and many thanks for this treasure!

Abe Lopez

Date: 5/17/2009 2:24:00 PM

awsome write. this is the magical 15 minutes before dark and at sunrise. love the imagery. Thank you for all of your kind words!

Alley Poe

Date: 5/16/2009 5:58:00 PM

I am loving the imagery from crimson red -Alley

P Sheart

Date: 5/16/2009 3:27:00 PM

Hi Lena Oh so soothing and peaceful, feels like home! Absolutely a perfect haiku! Good luck in contest! It's a winner either way for sure. Take care hun. Many blessings to you and yours. Love Light Truth Patricia

Raul Moreno

Date: 5/16/2009 1:05:00 PM

Thanks for supporting my contest Lolita...Raul

Christopher Higgins

Date: 5/16/2009 1:04:00 PM

The second line is tremendous..wonderful haiku.

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/16/2009 12:52:00 PM

So peaceful is this image....so lovely, Lena.~ Carrie