Sunset - Death Of My Father Minichu

By the sunset, you were ploughed
In a new tableau of color for every sun's new goodbye—
Life's bright glow on my skin fades now.

On my face, faith has known better days—
Smoothed stones— a walk through the past;
Wringed like my hands in his picture's pain.

Running track
Light cast
Set aback

By the sunset, you were ploughed,
Smoothed stones— a walk through the past,
Set aback.

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Watching his tears the day after in sunset rain,
God, guard the course...
No timeless room for new blame.

His ghostly squeeze now with my heart—
For his endearing hope in me snatched,
By his fire's ending of the dark.

Likewise glass
Sun catch
Lasts

Watching his tears the day after in sunset rain,
For his endearing hope in me snatched
Lasts.

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Date: 3/14/2024 9:07:00 AM
Was his death recent, Paige? Sorry for your loss. I recall writing a poem for my stepdad when he died over 15 years ago. My biological dad passed away around four years ago, and I felt privileged to get to go to his state for the funeral. I was not close with him, so I can imagine how much more painful must be the death of a father if they are very dear to your heart. This is so heart wrenching. A wonderful poem
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/9/2024 10:31:00 PM
So sorry. It was quite recent. My condolences
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Paige Hind
Date: 3/20/2024 3:57:00 PM
He died on February 27th, 2024. Thanks for your support- yes, it hurt a lot, I am hoping he went to a better place...
Date: 3/13/2024 6:21:00 AM
Condolences, Paige onyour loss! You have penned a magnificent write, my friend. I just sense in you, how great your Father was. Pangie
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Date: 3/12/2024 3:45:00 AM
Oh my god. Im so so sorry my sweet Paige. My father had a massive major heart attack too in February, and it was so scary and right now as i read this he is in the theatre for his second surgery , im sitting outside, distractng myself on soup. And i cant help but feel for you. My sweet paige. I send you my deepest condolences. Im so sorry for your loss. We are all here for you. Poetically, and cosmically.
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Paige Hind
Date: 3/13/2024 7:12:00 PM
I hope your father's surgery goes well. I hope he has many more years to live. Thanks for sharing your heart. Big hugs~
Date: 3/11/2024 7:06:00 PM
I offer my deepest condolences, dear Paige. The evocative imagery you have skillfully composed invokes profound emotions, igniting recollections of grief and affection.
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:35:00 PM
To live on in his footsteps with love, there is no greater honor, that could be given to a father! To carry someone's heart and soul within you past their life is what it means to be a father's child. With loving condolence. A.S.
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Paige Hind
Date: 3/11/2024 7:39:00 PM
Thank you, love.
Date: 3/3/2024 8:56:00 AM
I am so sorry for your loss dear Paige.. Is this a recent death or this a poem from the past?
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Paige Hind
Date: 3/11/2024 4:26:00 PM
My father passed on February 27th, 2024. It sprang on me suddenly and it left me in complete shock and grief. I am grateful to anyone who commented here. God bless.
Date: 3/2/2024 4:30:00 PM
Dear Paige, The imagery you crafted evokes profound emotions, stirring memories of loss and love. The way you paint the sunset as both a symbol of beauty and of the passage of time is hauntingly beautiful. Your words capture the essence of grief, of holding onto memories, and of finding peace in the remnants of what once was. This is excellent in showing this piece of your soul with the world. - Blessings, Daniel
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