Sunrise, Thorns

Sunrise, Thorns

Like a sunrise over a frozen lake,
swept by wind, you burst into my life.

The illusion of warmth flowed
over me and filled me until
that day when you left.

Now alone I wander; chilled,
now worse because you
had covered me with warmth.

Where does one go to
hide from conscience-ness -
to hide from dreams?

Where does one go to hide from unwanted reality, 
to try to stitch things back together
into a quilt that makes some 
semblance of sense?

Where does one go to escape the sunshine 
that is remembered so vividly that it pains?
Where does one go to find solace in the cold
emptiness of the wind-swept lake?

That first day when you had left, light faded
and I was impaled on the thorns of the rose 
that I had sought.
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Anaya Avatar
March 5, 2022 at 1:14 PM
Life happens, "Tis better to have loved and lost, then to have never loved at all--Alfred Lord Tennison. Beautiful verse.
Divinagracia Avatar
October 13, 2021 at 6:59 PM
Wonderful piece you have here. :)
Holmes Avatar
October 21, 2021 at 2:23 PM
Thank you Romnia - I appreciate you reading and taking time to comment David
Nicole Avatar
October 31, 2019 at 10:55 PM
"Like a sunrise over a frozen lake swept by wind, you burst into my life." This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. Sometimes love whispers softly along the skin, and then- disappears. You feel cold and alone. Your thought caress gently around my heart. Welcome to Poetry Soup. ~ Brandy
Dietrich Avatar
October 14, 2019 at 11:46 AM
For a first post, you showed us outstanding work, David. Best poem I think I saw today. FAVE
Holmes Avatar
October 14, 2019 at 11:53 AM
Andrea - wow, thank you wildly, so appreciate your comments and taking time to read my poem. DHolmes
Warrior Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 8:22 AM
Superbly crafted my friend... you're a super souper...welcome aboard the crazy train lol...you know that most poets are a little bit crazy...oh well, time to go feed my crocodiles at the petting zoo lol...^WW^ :o)
Holmes Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 9:02 AM
Winged - you are so right, poets are a bit crazy, only wish I had a few crocodiles to feed - I've got a few feral cats, does that count? Thanks for taking the time to read and comment - David
Radice Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 6:29 AM
Hi David, A warm welcome to PS from one newbie to another. I haven't commented on many poems as yet (I will be putting that right though) but just wanted to comment on your poem: "Sunrise, Thorns" It's a very powerful piece that captures the pain of loss 'beautifully' if that's the right word to use. Perhaps it isn't. Poems can be a wonderful means of catharsis. Well done!
Holmes Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 9:01 AM
Gary, thanks for taking time to read my poem, poems Can be a wonderful means of catharsis - I'm looking forward to being a part of the "soup" David
Lamoureux Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 10:50 AM
What an incredible first poem. I can see that you will fit in nicely. Welcome to the soup and thanks for commenting on my Broken People poem.
Holmes Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 10:56 AM
Thank you Richard, I am really enjoying the "soup" - and looking forward to growing and learning.
Kulkarni Avatar
October 7, 2019 at 12:35 PM
Very nicely written David! Welcome to Poetry Soup!
Holmes Avatar
October 7, 2019 at 1:42 PM
Kulkarni - thank you and thank you for the Welcome - I'm looking forward to learning and growing DHolmes
Sands Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 11:05 AM
Welcome to poetry Soup :)
Holmes Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 1:02 PM
Thank you - I'm looking forward to learning more about the website and learning, growing and improving.
Sands Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 10:33 AM
This poem is superb! Very well done :)
Holmes Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 10:57 AM
Thank you Heidi - it's the first poem I've posted, I'm glad you enjoyed the read D
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